Template:Did you know nominations/Black Cross Nurses

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The result was: promoted by Zanhe (talk) 19:07, 14 February 2016 (UTC)

Black Cross Nurses[edit]

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Black Cross Nurse's parade, 1922, Harlem, Manhattan, New York

... that the Black Cross Nurses associations, (pictured) trained women of African descent to be nurses, allowing them to be seen in public leadership roles, in an era when access to both was limited?

ALT1: ~~... that the Black Cross Nurses (pictured) required all its nurses to be of African descent, no older than 45 years old and able to read and write?~~
Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Louise Lincoln Kerr House and Studio
Comment: For WikiProject Women in Red's Black Women's History editathon

Created by SusunW (talk), Rosiestep (talk), and Megalibrarygirl (talk). Nominated by SusunW (talk) at 01:40, 1 February 2016 (UTC).

Substantial article on rich sources, thank you, team! Nice licensed image which gives a good idea of the time and style. The hook troubles me, sorry. One concern: where to put (pictured)? Not behind association, - the association is not pictured. Perhaps say it is modeled after the Red Cross, then you can drop "association"? I like the original hook better, but not enough yet. "to both" refers to what? Try harder? Perhaps something completely different? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 19:01, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

Thank you Gerda Arendt It is a reference to the fact that they were barred from education and public roles. What about: SusunW (talk) 19:19, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

ALT2: ... that in an era when women of African descent had little access to education or public role models, the Black Cross Nurses (pictured) trained them to be nurses, allowing them to be seen in leadership roles?

That works for me, thank you! Perhaps drop "to be nurses", as repetitive? Or rearrange the sentence,to have the two nurses not so close together? Watching for new ideas, but this works. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 20:29, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

Gerda Arendt I agree it's redundant. 197 chars if we use: SusunW (talk) 23:41, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

ALT3: ... that in an era when women of African descent had little access to education or public role models, the Black Cross Nurses (pictured) trained them in healthcare, allowing them to be seen in leadership roles?

Fine! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 23:50, 3 February 2016 (UTC)