Template:Did you know nominations/City of London swords

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:28, 1 February 2018 (UTC)

City of London swords[edit]

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... that Elizabeth II planned to hit Idi Amin with the Pearl Sword if he came to her Silver Jubilee, according to Lord Mountbatten? Independent, Telegraph, Huffington Post
- ALT1:... that the City of London has five ceremonial swords? Source: "The State sword originates from the mid-seventeenth century, ... There are a further four swords, the Pearl sword, the Mourning Sword, the Old Bailey Sword and the Mansion House Justice Room Sword" www.cityoflondon.gov.uk
- ALT2:... that the City of London swords include the Mourning, Pearl and State swords? Source: ditto

Reviewed: n/a (my third DYK nomination, which would be my fourth time featured. I'll look for one to review anyway, later)

Created by Mortee (talk). Self-nominated at 09:24, 19 January 2018 (UTC).

Hi Mortee, review follows: article created 19 January; article is of good length; article is well written and cited inline throughout to reliable sources; no copyvio or overly close paraphrasing detected ( a few similar phrasings but probably unavoidable); Hook facts are cited and backed up, I prefer the first hook. Though I suspect it was more of a light-hearted comment, it was apparently said by her to Mountbatten. I made a small change to refer to "the Pearl Sword" rather than "a pearl sword". It may sound better if the last clause about Mountbatten is moved top immediately after that: "that, according to Lord Mountbatten, ..." but I will leave that up to the promoter. QPQ checker shows only three DYK credits, so QPQ is not required. This is an excellent new article - Dumelow (talk) 20:40, 19 January 2018 (UTC)

Hi Dumelow, thank you for the kind review. I'm sure the Queen's comment was just a joke, as you say. The "according to..." lets us get away with that bit of poetic blurring, I think . I'm happy with your change, and I'd be happy with "according to Lord Mountbatten" being either at the start or the end. I actually put it at the start when I was writing the nomination but switched it. I think they both work. Mortee (talk) 23:31, 19 January 2018 (UTC)

As you say, we are merely stating the fact that it was according to Mountbatten so all good. Sometimes it is preferred to have the bolded article closer to the front so whoever promotes the hook may choose to leave it as it. Happy either way - Dumelow (talk) 23:50, 19 January 2018 (UTC)