Template:Did you know nominations/Du sollt Gott, deinen Herren, lieben, BWV 77
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The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk) 08:55, 21 September 2011 (UTC)
Du sollt Gott, deinen Herren, lieben, BWV 77[edit]
- ... that Bach structures his cantata movement Du sollt Gott, deinen Herren, lieben, BWV 77, on the Great Commandment by a canon of trumpet and continuo on Luther's chorale on the commandments?
- Reviewed: Dewiq
- Comment: expanded. Cantata for "Trinity 13", 18 September 2011, to appear between 17 September and 23 September.
Created/expanded by Gerda Arendt (talk). Self nom at 17:38, 12 September 2011 (UTC)
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The hook has a reference to Luther, but I find no mention of Luther in the article. I also find it confusing that the work is called a "movement" in the hook, and a "cantata" in the article. (Does the hook refer to the first movement of the cantata, which has the same title as the cantata itself?) Suggest wikilink the word continuo. Finally, I would prefer a simpler hook, if possible. Oceanh (talk) 00:05, 19 September 2011 (UTC)
- Insert Luther in article (s.a. German list of his songs de:Liste_der_Kirchenlieder_Luthers), but drop in hook for simplicity. Yes, it's the first movement, but to say that would make it even more complicated. If you have a simpler wording, great, but the fact is really something special about THIS cantata, we don't want to say something it has in common with others, right?
- ALT1:... that Bach structures his cantata movement Du sollt Gott, deinen Herren, lieben, BWV 77, on the Great Commandment by a canon of trumpet and continuo on a chorale on the Ten Commandments? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 08:31, 19 September 2011 (UTC)
- ALT2:... that Bach structures the opening chorus of his cantata Du sollt Gott, deinen Herren, lieben, BWV 77, on the Great Commandment by a canon of trumpet and continuo on a chorale on the Ten Commandments? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 09:19, 19 September 2011 (UTC)
- ALT3:... that Bach structures the opening chorus of his cantata Du sollt Gott, deinen Herren, lieben, BWV 77, about the Great Commandment, by a canon on a chorale on the Ten Commandments in trumpet and continuo? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 09:19, 19 September 2011 (UTC)
- ALT1 looks good to me Woz2 (talk) 12:33, 19 September 2011 (UTC)
- ALT2 and 3 were devised to meet the concern, that BWV 77 is the complete cantata, whereas the hook is only about its first movement, --Gerda Arendt (talk) 17:04, 19 September 2011 (UTC)