Template:Did you know nominations/José Carlos Cocarelli

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The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 06:53, 6 September 2014 (UTC)

José Carlos Cocarelli[edit]

  • ... that José Carlos Cocarelli studied the piano in New York on a scholarship from the Brazilian government and won important competitions?
  • ALT1:... that a New York Times review noted pianist José Carlos Cocarelli's "thoughtful rubatos and ... almost brooding intensity"?
  • Reviewed: Wilhelm Münter Rolfsen
  • Comment: I would prefer to say something about his playing rather than competitions, but am not yet happy with the wording. See also talk page. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 22:07, 24 July 2014 (UTC)

5x expanded by Voceditenore (talk), Gerda Arendt (talk). Nominated by Gerda Arendt (talk) at 22:07, 24 July 2014 (UTC).

Comment: Voceditenore did so much that I am almost ashamed to list myself also as a contributor any more. However, I started expanding, and I almost got blocked for it ;)
  • Yes, ALT2 is probably a better hook. The first two don't seem particularly 'beguiling' to the reader. Gerda, what talk page are you referring to when you say "See also talk page"? I don't see anything related to these hooks at Talk:José Carlos Cocarelli. But maybe I'm missing something? Voceditenore (talk) 07:51, 25 July 2014 (UTC)
Hook and date are fine. Expansion is closer to tenfold than fivefold, fantastic work! AGF on the source (I don't speak Spanish, but I have no reason to doubt the authors). Good to go. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 22:01, 5 September 2014 (UTC)