Template:Did you know nominations/Lydia Emelie Gruchy

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The result was: promoted by PFHLai (talk) 20:05, 26 December 2015 (UTC)

Lydia Emelie Gruchy[edit]

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... that 13 years after Lydia Emelie Gruchy graduated with honors and her theological degree, she was allowed to be ordained by the United Church of Canada?

Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Jean Sibelius
Comment: For WikiProject Women in Red's Women in Religion editathon

Created by SusunW (talk). Self-nominated at 18:54, 10 December 2015 (UTC).

Interesting career with difficulties, on good sources, offline sources accepted AGF. The hook is sourced but reads a bit too harmless. Can you stress the tension of those 13 years a bit more. It would also not hurt to say that she was the first women ordained. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 23:36, 12 December 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the review Gerda Arendt I was trying to avoid using "first woman" as it seems to be used so often, but what about:

ALT1 ... that after 13 years of rejection, Lydia Emelie Gruchy, who had graduated with honors and her theological degree, became the first woman ordained by the United Church of Canada in 1936? or
ALT2 ... that after 13 years of ignoring the requests of the Saskatchewan Council on behalf of Lydia Emelie Gruchy, she was finally ordained by the United Church of Canada in 1936? SusunW (talk) 00:33, 13 December 2015 (UTC)

My wording of the same would be

ALT3 ... that 13 years after Lydia Emelie Gruchy graduated her theological studies with honors, she was finally ordained in 1936 as the first female minister of the United Church of Canada? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 07:53, 13 December 2015 (UTC)

ALT3 preferred ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:15, 13 December 2015 (UTC)