Template:Did you know nominations/Miroslava Breach

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The result was: promoted by — Maile (talk) 14:37, 14 November 2017 (UTC)

Miroslava Breach[edit]

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... ~~that Miroslava Breach, a Mexican investigative journalist known for covering human rights violations, was murdered by unknown assailants in March 2017?~~ Source: [1]
- ALT1:~~... that Miroslava Breach, a Mexican journalist murdered in March, 2017, had exposed the extensive corruption of former Governor of Chihuahua César Duarte Jáquez's government?~~ Source: [2]
- ALT2: ... that Miroslava Breach, a Mexican investigative journalist known for exposing human rights violations and political corruption, was murdered in March 2017? Source: [3]

Reviewed: (only second nomination)

Created by Vami IV (talk). Nominated by Insertcleverphrasehere (talk) at 02:22, 11 November 2017 (UTC).

The article has been tagged for confusing construction and the need for copyediting by a native English speaker. Please apply at WP:GOCE for assistance. Yoninah (talk) 21:16, 11 November 2017 (UTC)

@Yoninah. I have reviewed the article and found that the tags were not added appropriately (they did no apply to the article). Not sure why ToniSant added them in the first place as he didn't leave a message explaining them and a quick scan through the article did not confuse me or reveal any desperate need for copy editing. — Insertcleverphrasehere ^{(or here)} 21:24, 11 November 2017 (UTC)

New review needed. The tags are no longer present in the article. North America¹⁰⁰⁰ 11:02, 12 November 2017 (UTC)
-Article is new enough (created in mainspace yesterday); easily long enough; is relatively neutral considering the subject (and also probably a case of ESL), sufficiently cited, and with no copyright or paraphrasing issues; both hooks are well within character limit, accurate, sourced, and broadly interesting (althuogh I prefer the second one- more detailed and hooky?); no QPQ required from nominator; image is N/A. It could certainly still do with a going over by GOCE, but it's by no means unreadable. This is my QPQ for Template:Did you know nominations/Sir John Minsterworth. Cheers, — fortunavelut luna 18:39, 12 November 2017 (UTC)

I did a thorough copyedit for English grammar. I also edited the hook, and struck the ALT1 hook for BLP issues. Yoninah (talk) 19:20, 12 November 2017 (UTC)

What was the BLP issue Yoninah (talk · contribs)? — fortunavelut luna 19:25, 12 November 2017 (UTC)

I think the concern is that the hook I wrote says "corruption" as if it is proven, but the investigation is ongoing. I'm fine with striking that hook and going with #1. — Insertcleverphrasehere ^{(or here)} 20:10, 12 November 2017 (UTC)

Right. Yoninah (talk) 21:50, 12 November 2017 (UTC)

I have strick the first option and added a new ALT.. The issue was that 'unknown assailants' no longer is appropriate as the police say they have identified the perpetrators. Is ALT 2 satisfactory to you guys? — Insertcleverphrasehere ^{(or here)} 21:03, 13 November 2017 (UTC)

Fine with me. Yoninah (talk) 21:23, 13 November 2017 (UTC)

Yoninah's the important opinion here, but yes, agree ALT2 is sound. — fortunavelut luna 21:29, 13 November 2017 (UTC)