Template:Did you know nominations/Rebecca McDonnell

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The result was: promoted by BlueMoonset (talk) 00:22, 29 August 2012 (UTC)

Rebecca McDonnell

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• ... that 2012 Australian Paralympic table tennis player Rebecca McDonnell was the first Australian woman to ever compete at the table tennis Para World Championships?

• Reviewed: Jacobiasca formosana
• Comment: Moved from user space. Save for Paralympics?

Created/expanded by LauraHale (talk). Self nom at 04:14, 27 July 2012 (UTC)

• Article checks out in all the usual ways, as does the hook. I have two issues, though. First, a lot of the statements have double or triple (or even more) references--Wikipedia:Citation overkill is instructive reading--and many of them are not arranged properly (superscript footnotes should be in the proper order). Second, the prose is not very attractive. Sentence variation is completely lacking (there's only one type of sentence in here--simple sentence in SVO order) and the almost complete absence of punctuation besides the mandatory periods makes this very unattractive. I'll pass this as soon as some effort is made to make this more legible to the average reader. Drmies (talk) 01:52, 28 July 2012 (UTC)

• Extra citations removed. Attempts to fix prose also done. --LauraHale (talk) 02:04, 28 July 2012 (UTC)

• That's what counts, I suppose. BTW, "was selected to represent" instead of "will represent" is pure verbosity; the only time that's relevant is if she's selected but doesn't go. Drmies (talk) 02:42, 28 July 2012 (UTC)