Template:Did you know nominations/Susan O'Malley
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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 22:24, 22 March 2018 (UTC)
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Susan O'Malley[edit]
... that Susan O'Malley was the first woman to become president of a National Basketball Association franchise?- ALT1:
... that at age 29, Susan O'Malley became the first woman to serve as president of an NBA team?
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- Reviewed: Mindy Alper
5x expanded by Innisfree987 (talk). Self-nominated at 03:22, 10 March 2018 (UTC).
- Expansion was started on 8 March, and by far exceeds the threshold. This is a pretty massive expansion, having only been the length of two three prose sentences before Innisfree987's contributions, and I commend them on their work! The article is well cited, and is fairly neutral, with good uses of quotations from citations. I don't see any obvious issues with the way the article is formatted, and the nominator's QPQ is satisfactory. The one thing I would change, however, is the hook. It's no doubt an interesting hook, marking the first woman to head a franchise in a major North American sporting league, though it can be slightly shortened and worded better. My suggestion is below. – PhilipTerryGraham (talk · contribs · count) 12:46, 13 March 2018 (UTC)
- ALT2: ... that Susan O'Malley was the first female president of a National Basketball Association franchise?
- Thanks for the review and the kind words, PhilipTerryGraham, as well as the tightened hook--that phrasing looks good to me! Innisfree987 (talk) 17:17, 13 March 2018 (UTC)
- @Innisfree987:
– hook has been updated, and now I'm good to give this nomination the green light! – PhilipTerryGraham (talk · contribs · count) 17:26, 13 March 2018 (UTC)
- @Innisfree987:
- Thanks for the review and the kind words, PhilipTerryGraham, as well as the tightened hook--that phrasing looks good to me! Innisfree987 (talk) 17:17, 13 March 2018 (UTC)
