Template:Did you know nominations/The Grand Canyon of the Yellowstone (1872)

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The result was: promoted by Theleekycauldron (talk) 23:12, 11 September 2022 (UTC)

The Grand Canyon of the Yellowstone (1872)

The Grand Canyon of the Yellowstone (1872)
The Grand Canyon of the Yellowstone (1872)

Created by Bruxton (talk) and Mistico Dois (talk). Nominated by Bruxton (talk) at 04:40, 31 August 2022 (UTC).

  • Hi Bruxton, review follows: article moved to mainspace 31 August and exceeds minimum length; article is cited inline throughout to reliable sources; I didn't find any overly close paraphrasing from the article (phrases such as "served as inspiration for the initial conservation of Yellowstone", "world’s first national park" are probably unavoidable); hook is interesting, mentioned in the article and checks out to source cited; image is free and appropriately licensed; a QPQ has been carried out. A handful of other comments - Dumelow (talk) 09:55, 31 August 2022 (UTC)
  • "Moran did a first painting" feels a bit colloquial
  • "It is a 7 ft (2.1 m) by 12 ft (3.7 m) “The Grand Canyon of the Yellowstone,” and it was purchased by the United States Congress for $10,000" the title appearing here is strange and needs some wording around the size: "is a 7ftx12ft painting" or something.
  • The first sentence of "Reception" repeats the purchase and price
  • Likewise you have "The expedition influenced the public and government officials" in "History and description" then cover this again in "Reception"
  • "The public was not aware of the beauty of Yellowstone prior to Moran's painting" is a bold claim that I couldn't immediately find in the source
Dumelow Thank you for reviewing. I wrote this article too quickly. I have made the corrections. Bruxton (talk) 14:01, 31 August 2022 (UTC)
Thanks Bruxton, will take a look. Just noticed you seem to have lost a reference at the end of the first paragraph of "History and description" - Dumelow (talk) 14:10, 31 August 2022 (UTC)
Dumelow Found it! <:ref name="Reinhardt"/> Bruxton (talk) 15:27, 31 August 2022 (UTC)
Thanks Bruxton, looks OK to me now - Dumelow (talk) 16:01, 31 August 2022 (UTC)