User:Farquaadhnchmn/HHNsubpage

Halloween Horror Nights (Orlando)

• I'm not much of a peer reviewer, but I have a few suggestions:

• • It's kind of crufty, see WP:CRUFT. Specifically, a long list detailing overly specific information on every year the event took place isn't really necessary; I suggest shortening them some and creating sub-articles covering certain headers and providing some sections summarizing the list.

• • The opening section should be at least one paragraph long; for an article as long as this, 2-3 paragraphs. Provide an overview of what the article will be describing, a summary.

• • It's more of a list than an article; under many headings, there is a brief description then a list of something. Try mentioning a few parts of the list in the main part of the section, and at least a few of the lists.

• • The article is a bit long; most FAs are 32 kilobytes or shorter, this one is 38. While this isn't a very big deal for now, you could gradually shorten it over time, to maybe 35 KB.

• Overall, you a very good job on this; while it could definitely use a lot of improvement, it's off to a pretty good start. Instead of promoting it to featured status, I suggest focusing on making it a GA for now, and once it gets there, you'll be a long way through, and though it will still need a lot of work, I'm sure you could promote this eventually. —The Great Llama^[[

The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.

• Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at Wikipedia:Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.

• Consider adding more links to the article; per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (links) and Wikipedia:Build the web, create links to relevant articles.

• Per WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, previous [day/week/month/year] might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.

• See if possible if there is a free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.

• Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), when doing conversions, please use standard abbreviations: for example, miles -> mi, kilometers squared -> km², and pounds -> lb.

• Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Build the web, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link January 15, 2006.

• Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (headings), headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.

• Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)

• • Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”

• Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a.

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, AZ _t 23:28, 1 December 2006 (UTC)