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Article Evaluation (Week 2)

Article I am reviewing : Libbie Hyman

The article that I am reviewing is Libbie Hyman, who is a comparative anatomist who's main work is "A Laboratory Manual for Elementary Zoology, The Invertebrates". All of the information in this article is relevant to the title because it talks about the life and work of Libbie Hyman, who is the subject of the article. The article remains fairly neutral, in that it is a biography written about her life, the only thing that could be biased is that they wrote about her life in such a positive light and left out the negative parts of her life. A couple of the links that are found throughout the text are useful for specifying or explaining what is being talked about, all of these links work and go to reputable sources. Most of the citations work and are linked to reputable sources, but there are a couple citations that are incomplete. These incomplete citations are labeled as, "citation needed", it makes the article seem very incomplete and not very professional. The references, also known as sources, at the bottom of the page are all very reputable except for references six and seven because the links to those do not work so they need to be adjusted so that they lead us to the correct article. From what I can see, there is no plagiarism in this article because everything is properly cited, and a lot of this article is filled with facts. The Talk Page isn't very active, there are a couple of comments involving questions to specify ideas in the article. One big thing in the Talk Page is the addition of an external link for one of the links that didn't work in the reference section. This article is rated C-class and is apart of a Wikiproject, so it explains why it isn't as professional and has a couple of missing citations and loose links. We haven't really talked about specific comparative anatomists in class yet, so all of this information is new to me and I have nothing to compare it to. This article is talking about a women in science which can be a very touchy subject because they aren't always accepted like they should be, but this article strays away from the controversial side and focuses more on the facts about her life and her works.

Article Edit (Week 3)

I will be making an edit on the Libbie Hyman article, there are a lot of items that I can edit, but I have decided to focus on the plagiarism throughout the article. One section where I found plagiarism is when it says," In addition to her major project, Hyman extensively revised A Laboratory Manual for Comparative Vertebrate Anatomy in 1942 into a textbook as well as laboratory manual; she referred to it as her "bread and butter" for its income.[citation needed] ".

My suggestion to fix this plagiarism would be by saying, " Hyman's "bread and butter" for her income in 1942 was a textbook and lab manual based on her revisions of A Laboratory Manual for Comparative Vertebrate Anatomy. [citation needed]

The citation for this information is:

Sack, H. (2021, December 6). Libbie Hyman and her passion for the invertebrates. SciHi Blog. Retrieved February 25, 2022, from http://scihi.org/libbie-hyman-invertebrates/ 

The information that I am thinking about revising is involved in the plagiarism and lack of citation in this information," Hyman extensively revised A Laboratory Manual for Comparative Vertebrate Anatomy in 1942 into a textbook as well as laboratory manual; she referred to it as her "bread and butter" for its income.[citation needed] ". I have created a paraphrased version of this and found a citation that will fit this information. Let me know what you think about this.

3 Article Preferences (Week 4)

1. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bowfin (Bowfin)

I chose this article because it is an overview of Bowfin fish, and since I don't know much about them it helps me get an understanding on them.

A couple edits I can make on this page is the need for a couple citations throughout the article and I could add a section on comparisons to other fish like it.

2. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Fish_anatomy (Fish Anatomy)

I chose this article because this gives the specifics of fish anatomy and since I am dissecting a Bowfin I want to be able to recognize all the major features of them.

A couple of edits that I could make are adding a couple of citations, along with definitions of specific things that aren't as clear. I could also correct a couple of grammar mishaps a lot the way.

3. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Chordate (Chordate)

I chose this article because Bowfin are located in the Chordata phylum, so It will give me a good idea of the characteristics of a chordate.

A couple edits I could make are correcting the sources into more of a primary source rather than a secondary source. I could also add in better images to represent what they are trying to say.

Article Outline/ Game-plan (Week 5)

I am thinking about editing two articles, Bowfin and Amia (fish).

I will be focusing on the skull of the Bowfin, and in the Bowfin article I will add onto the Morphology. There is already an image of the lateral view of the skull, so I will add a internal inside view of the skull. This will allow for me to explain the anatomy of the inside of the skull and the physiology for what each anatomical part does.

In the Amia article I will be doing a similar thing, but I will be discussing the anatomy of the skull in detail. I will also look at different species of Amia and compare the skulls to see if there are any differences between them.

I was also thinking of adding a armored skulled addition to the Fish anatomy article so it is more specific and relevant. I would also add a picture of the Bowfin skull to the page.

The articles that I will use as sources for these edits are

1. Amia Calva

2. Bowfin Description

3. Bowfin Information

Looking for books or scientific journals that have more information on the anatomy of the skull. There isn't much information on the skulls of Bowfin.

Proposed Edits (Week 6)

Additions are in Italics

Edit for Bowfin:

The skull of the bowfin is made of two layers of skull, the dermatocranium and the chondrocranium. The chondrocranium layer cannot be seen because it is located below the dermal bones. The bowfin skull is made up of 28 fused bones, which compose the dermatocranium. The roof of the mouth is made up of three bones, the ectopterygoid, the palantine, and the vomer. The teeth are on two bones, the premaxillae and the maxillae. They have two sets of teeth, one set of larger sharp teeth coming out of the gums to grasp and control the prey. Another set of teeth towards the back that are connected to the hyomandibular bone are used for sorting out nutrients and grinding down larger pieces of food. [1]

References: Bowfin Teeth

I will add an image of the inside of the bowfin skull so you can see both sets of teeth and all of the bones inside the skull. I will add this when we cut the bowfin's skull in half to get a view of this, or I will take a picture of the Amia skull that we have in the museum to add to the article.

Peer Review Response (Week 9)

When I was looking at the peer review feedback, there were some valuable things that I took out of it, such as adding cross links for specific words that have a Wikipedia page. There were also comments about finding a peer reviewed source instead of the one that I have now. A lot of the comments showed positivity in adding an image of the bowfin jaw and teeth.

My plan for the revisions on my first draft is to add a cross link to the hyomandibula Wikipedia page and look for a new peer reviewed source. This might require me to change my information that was used because it wasn’t peer reviewed. The last thing would be taking a picture of the inside of the skull at the next lab so I can have a good image to add and back up my words. If taking a picture in the lab doesn't work out, there is a couple of images online that I can use as a good reference.

Draft #2 (Week 11)

Additions are in Italics

Edit for Bowfin:

The skull of the bowfin is made of two layers of skull, the dermatocranium and the chondrocranium. The chondrocranium layer cannot be seen because it is located below the dermal bones. The bowfin skull is made up of 28 fused bones, which compose the dermatocranium. The roof of the mouth is made up of three bones, the ectopterygoid, the palantine, and the vomer. The teeth are on two bones, the premaxillae and the maxillae. They have two sets of teeth, one set of larger sharp teeth coming out of the gums to grasp and control the prey. Another set of teeth towards the back that are connected to the Hyomandibula bone are used for sorting out nutrients and grinding down larger pieces of food. [2]

References: Bowfin Teeth

Amia Skull and Development

Amia Calva Occipital

I will add an image of the inside of the bowfin skull so you can see both sets of teeth and all of the bones inside the skull. I cut the skull in half and will take pictures of it in lab next week so I will be able to add a new picture of the skull to Wikipedia next week.

Updated Draft #2 (Week 12)

The skull of the bowfin is made of two layers of skull, the Dermatocranium and the Chondrocranium. The chondrocranium layer cannot be seen because it is located below the dermal bones. The bowfin skull is made up of 28 fused bones, which compose the dermatocranium. The roof of the mouth is made up of three bones, the ectopterygoid, the palatine, and the vomer. The teeth are on two bones, the premaxillae and the maxillae. They have two sets of teeth, one set of larger sharp teeth coming out of the Mandible and Premaxilla bones to grasp and control the prey. Another set of teeth towards the back, called pharyngeal tooth patches that are connected to the Hyomandibula bone are used for sorting out nutrients and grinding down larger pieces of food.

I will add an image of the inside of the bowfin skull so you can see both sets of teeth and all of the bones inside the skull. I cut the skull in half and will take pictures of it in lab next week so I will be able to add a new picture of the skull to Wikipedia next week.

Final Draft (Week 13)

This edit will take place in the Bowfin article under the "Morphology" section.

The additions are in italics.

The skull of the bowfin is made of two layers of skull, the Dermatocranium and the Chondrocranium. The chondrocranium layer cannot be seen because it is located below the dermal bones. The bowfin skull is made up of 28 fused bones, which compose the dermatocranium. The roof of the mouth is made up of three bones, the ectopterygoid, the palatine, and the vomer. The teeth are on two bones, the premaxillae and the maxillae. They have two sets of teeth, one set of larger sharp teeth coming out of the Mandible and Premaxilla bones to grasp and control the prey. Another set of teeth towards the back, called pharyngeal tooth patches that are connected to the Hyomandibula bone are used for sorting out nutrients and grinding down larger pieces of food.

Changes have been published to the Bowfin article!!! My references are 15,16,17 in the article.

Dorsal view of a Bowfin skull, showing the pharyngeal tooth patches which are connected to the internal portion of the hyomandibular bone. Acquired from Pacific Lutheran University.