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Please help me with...Hi there, I have started a page in my sandbox on the phrase 'Total inequality'. I am a first time contributor. I would be very gratful for any guidance you might have. Many thanks Adrian Cronin

Adriancronin (talk) 21:50, 31 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, Adriancronin. The very first thing you should know is that you should never use Wikipedia articles as references in another Wikipedia article. It's because Wikipedia articles are not considered WP:reliable sources. Try to replace those with sources from reliable publishers; e.g. GINI coefficient statistics are published by organizations like the World Bank. (I've left the help-me question open so that other editors may also provide input to you. You can also ask me here if you have further questions). – Finnusertop (talkcontribs) 00:06, 1 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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Please help me with... Hi again, I've changed the references, thanks for that. I'm still getting some errors on some of the reference titles, do I get these from the web page source code?

Thanks

Adrian Cronin

Adriancronin (talk) 11:10, 1 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, Adriancronin... I'm Wikipelli... by no means an expert but willing to have a look.
you might notice that I tinkered with your World Bank ref a little bit. All I did was use the template in the editor cite web and fill in as much information as I could from the website. I suspect that something was missing from your initial citation.
I also 'named' the reference. That's something you can do when creating a reference in the template (Reference name=___). The benefit of this, as you can probably see, is that you can reuse that reference without entering in the information again and it will also combine instances of it being used in your text into one reference with a superscript 'a' and 'b'. (see this page for more info) If you have questions, please let me know and I'll try to answer them! Wikipelli Talk 12:16, 1 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks wikipeddi, much obliged. In your opinion, is this ready for submission for review? Many thanks Adrian Cronin Adriancronin (talk) 12:51, 1 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I think there are a couple of cosmetic things to tidy up... some are part of Wikipedia's Manual of Style (MOS). In the lede (the first introductory paragraph), the title of the article is always first and always bold. Personal opinion, I wouldn't link inequality in the title and you really shouldn't ever link to a disambiguation page. If you want the reader to be able to check 'inequality' you could link to the Wiktionary definition of the word (https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/inequality). I would link the second time the word inequality is used in your article.
Now, as a layman, I have no earthly idea what you're talking about in the article but that's just because of my ignorance of the topic!  :) Do you want to expand more on real-life examples and illustrations (which would help someone like me)? Something to give the reader more sense of why this is important. Just some thoughts.  :) Wikipelli Talk 13:09, 1 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks wikipelli. I think your suggestions have moved it forward. Any more gratefully recieved. Thanks

Adrian

Adriancronin (talk) 21:41, 1 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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Hello there,

I am getting lots of great input on my first submission. I've made additional changes today taking on board all the suggestions which I do think have improved it.

Any more suggestions would be much appreciated.

Thanks

Adrian Cronin

Adriancronin (talk) 20:49, 1 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

You're going to need a lot more sources that specifically talk about "total inequality", not just "complete inequality". Additionally, when a sources (from two months ago) says "Let's call it Total Inequality" it makes me think that this is a neologism, which Wikipedia does not accept. So bottom line, find more sources, use fewer quotes, and then submit the draft. Primefac (talk) 06:28, 2 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]