User talk:AveryMcC

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Hello, AveryMcC, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:30, 1 October 2020 (UTC)

Hi!

Good afternoon Avery,

Thank you for reaching out on my Talk page! I wanted to reciprocate your kindness and introduce myself as well. I am Brady McEvoy and I am also a Communications major but minoring in Comparative History of Ideas. I look forward to a great year in COM 482.

Best, Bradyamcevoy (talk) 21:58, 9 October 2020 (UTC)

Welcome!

Greetings AveryMcC and welcome (again!) to both Wikipedia and to COM482! I think Brandy Melville is a good choice for an article. Although I know it's a stub, the article is rather advanced compared to some other stubs. As a result, you might need to dig a bit deeper to make significant improvements. I see you've started that and added some text and a number of what appear to be pretty good references. So you're off to a good start. If you see stuff in the articles that you think isn't encyclopedic (e.g., like the list of shops by region) you might want to consider removing it. Just a thought.

Look at the talk page of the article (Talk:Brandy Melville) for related WikiProjects (like Wikipedia:WikiProject Retailing or Wikipedia:WikiProject Fashion) that will have links to excellent articles on similar topics which should point you at models and examples of how to improve the article. I'm looking forward to seeing things developed. Good luck!

...It's probably already clear but I'm assuming based on your contributions that your goal is to edit the Brandy Melville article. As a result, I've removed links from your dashboard page to Pecorino Romano (which seemed to be a quite developed) and Ziggy Marley and the Melody Makers discography which seems like it might be not be a great article since it's a discography. Both those other articles were still listed as assigned to you. —mako๛ 20:14, 19 October 2020 (UTC)

Peer Review

Hi Avery! Just writing to let you know I created a subpage and used the prompted template for my peer review for your Brandy Melville article!https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:AveryMcC/Brandy_Melville/Emmaaitelli_Peer_Review?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_peer_review I added the addition of categories to separate out your information. Hope this helps!Emmaaitelli (talk) 20:19, 23 October 2020 (UTC)

COM 482 Peer Review

Hi Avery, I just peer reviewed your article. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:AveryMcC/Brandy_Melville/Shy63_Peer_Review Shy63 (talk) 05:38, 23 October 2020 (UTC)

Peer Review

Hi! I peer reviewed your article here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:AveryMcC/User:AveryMcC/Brandy_Melville/Lalevi_Peer_Review Lalevi (talk) 22:07, 23 October 2020 (UTC)

Feedback on your draft

Greetings AveryMcC! I've taken a quick pass on User:AveryMcC/Brandy Melville and made some edits there. You should check those out. I had some other feedback:

• The history section you've added seems to include a bunch of material that is really more about the controversy. Should these be merged?
• The history section you've added has a bunch of () but no actual references? Are these missing?
• Smaller issue: Can you find a source for the "shops by country/region" section? If you can't find a source, you might want to remove since it will go out of date quickly (if it hasn't already).

In any case, it's hard to me to evaluate this based on what I've seen so far. Please do a pass on your article as soon as you can and then let me know. I'll give your article another pass before I give you the final go-ahead to make your article live. —mako๛ 19:27, 4 November 2020 (UTC)

Hi Mako, I just finished up my article and fixed a ton of things. Let me know if I can move it to live now.

Thanks, Avery