User talk:Cocomelon2005/Emma Tenayuca
Matthew's peer review[edit]
- Whose work are you reviewing?
- Jayda's and Aporinta's
Questions:
- Is there content missing or content that does not belong?
2. Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
3. Is the content well organized?
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cocomelon2005/Emma_Tenayuca?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- https://en.wikipedia.org/Emma_Tenayuca
- doesn't seem to me like any missing content
- lead - include connections to communism
- yes - well organized, but don't have a) b) c) d) under "Labor union activism"
lead looks good; include something about ties to communism
does a source say why Tenayuca became interested in communism specifically?
for the photo: remove "Photograph shows the couple"
I like that you have a quote in a box
under "Legacy", the phrase "The admiration felt for her can be seen in..." isn't really neutral/necessary
is there any update/could you find anything on the 2021 biography written about Tenayuca?
Under "Labor union activism", it's really good that you have clearly organized and split the sections into a/b/c/d, but don't have the a/b/c/d, just have the info
sources look good
wording/grammar things that I would change:
under "Early life":
11 -> eleven
Mexico-U.S. War -> Mexican-American War (would be a good spot for a hyperlink)
under "Education and personal life"
In 1938-add comma after 1938
under "Political involvement"
"Another source of Tenayuca's first-hand knowledge of the struggles of working people came from"-i would say this sentence/wording isn't really necessary
Plaza del Zacate, which means grass plaza -> Plaza del Zacate ("grass plaza")
anticommunist -> anti-communist
Emma Tenayuca decided to leave the Communist Party -> Emma Tenayuca left the Communist Party
She finished a distant third -> She finished in third
Overall great job, you have definitely improved the original article in many ways
- Matthew Binder Environmentography (talk) 20:33, 13 April 2023 (UTC)