User talk:Impactfulmatter/COVID-19 Racial Disparities in the United States/Bibliography

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Thanks for this initial take on the lead, which highlights important issues, and the outline. Since the topic is primarily health focused, I don't think you need to separate out the health issues into a single section, but otherwise the topics proposed look good. I'm eager to see how this article involves as you incorporate the useful information you have compiled.

One of the most challenging things is to write a first sentence of a Wikipedia article. Formal advice is here, but this is especially tricky when the subject is a phenomenon rather than a concrete noun. May I suggest starting with this and then modifying:

The spread, impact, and mortality of the COVID-19 pandemic in the United States has been marked by racial disparities, disproportionately impacting nearly all racial minorities.

Since people often only read the lead of Wikipedia articles, the goal is to provide specific facts in lieu of generalities wherever possible. So you might replace as follows:

The COVID-19 pandemic struck the United States in March 2020, causing XX million known cases by June 1 . During that initial wave, known cases were more than than twice as common among Black Americans (62 per 10,000) and over three times as common among Latino Americans (73 per 10,000) as among white Americans (23 cases per 10,000).[1] There were both health and economic consequences due to the pandemic. In the US, minority groups were disproportionately impacted by the health and economic consequences of to the pandemic. The COVID-19 pandemic made existing racial and ethnic disparities in the United States apparent through the risks of COVID, economic and financial tolls, and racism faced in the midst of everything else. Within a year of the pandemic starting, When COVID vaccines have been made and have begun began to be distributed to the public in December 2020, initial vaccinations were again distributed unequally by race: more specific facts on this. The vaccine rollout has also made racial disparities in the midst of COVID apparent.

Somewhere close to the top, you will need some authoritative numbers on COVID incidence and mortality. The "Color of Coronavirus" page you cited looks good for that.

Some useful general advice on tone from WP:BETTER: "The tone, however, should always remain formal, impersonal, and dispassionate. … It is not Wikipedia's role to try to convince the reader of anything, only to provide the salient facts as best they can be determined, and the reliable sources for them." So wherever possible, state facts first and bring in intellectual authorities or compelling figures to make judgments.

Some authoritative comments on this issue include:

  • American Medical Association: [2] [3]
  • American Public Health Association: [4]
  • CDC [5]

Thanks for a solid start!--Carwil (talk) 22:03, 21 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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