User talk:Jullian93/sandbox

Jullian, You're off to an excellent start here, and have a good sense of both the topic and the conventions of Wikipedia. Here are a few points to consider:

for your question about Oxford Art Online, maybe cite for the URL the general website for it http://www.oxfordartonline.com/

since giving people a PSU specific link, and one that needs a password, isn't that helpful.

Since you're expanding an existing entry, add notations to where you'll be putting the different pieces of text. For example, the Olg Grabar tidbit seems like it would go somewhere different in the entry than the next part perhaps?
It will be challenging to integrate what you've written with the existing entry. It's okay to revise what's already there as you add, but your text seems to partially overlap. That said, it's clear you definitely have new material to bring to the topic.
In terms of your sources, I'm surprised more material isn't coming from the Grabar book, and why are #3 and 4 the same in terms of pages?
is there another image or two you could add to the entry as well?
a minor mechanical issue is the confusion between it's and its

Please touch base with any questions!

AMcClanan (talk) 20:41, 26 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get right on your comments - I'm nervous to add pictures for copy right issues, but I'll give it a shot. I'll comb through the book and see if I can find more to add. I've been struggling to synthesize a lot of data into a wiki voice without closely copying the new information word for word. Once I dilute additions from the original post, I find at least a 10-1 ratio. In the ensuing week, I'll be adding more based off of your comments.

Grammatically, I'll be sure to comb over it before my final post!

Thanks professor, for your care and this cool opportunity.

Jullian93 (talk) 23:40, 27 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Feedback[edit]

Awesome job on your draft, succinct and easy to understand, good job tying in the history of the compound with its architecture. Pictures or a map of the compound and the structures therein would probably help immensely for ease of understanding if there aren't already any present on your topics main page.

-Connor — Preceding unsigned comment added by DG14420 (talk • contribs) 18:18, 28 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback from Prof McClanan, 12/7[edit]

It doesn't look like your material has been integrated into the site, please email me if you do so by Sunday--thanks!

AMcClanan (talk) 22:46, 7 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]