User talk:Ksoto12/Living room

Your information is very informative. Your writing style is easy to understand and does not contain a bias tone. Your recourses seem credible and concise. Great job! HannahFrandrup (talk) 04:34, 25 February 2021 (UTC) Hannah Frandrup

In the section "From Parlour to Living Room" it is stated that the change in terminology is credited to Edward Bok, (linked which was helpful) but maybe add a little bit more as to how he coined that term. Was it in his writing in Ladies Home Journal? It needs context. Without following the link to his page it is not informative. The last sentence states that only the wealthy could afford spaces such as parlours, libraries, drawing rooms, smoking rooms and servants quarters. The first 4 rooms are all lounges of some sort however servants quarters seems out of place. Servants quarters would not be used for reception or lounging and I feel this type of space is unrelated to the living room and should be removed. The section "From death room to living room" is confusing. I think it is understood in the previous paragraphs that the room has had several names and has changed over time so the first sentence is redundant. The statement that after WWI it was the least used space could be included elsewhere instead of in a section of its own. In the section "The Evolution of the Modern Living Room", in the last sentence "leisure" is used as a verb which is incorrect. Perhaps change it to "relax" or similar. In the section "The Modern Evolution of the Living Room", the 3rd paragraph starts "for example". This is unclear. What is it an example of? The last sentence of this section should be split into 2 sentences or rearranged to read more clearly. The photos are well done, informative, nicely linked and all have time periods. Overall, the organization of the page is good and understandable.Jcappotto (talk) 07:27, 28 February 2021 (UTC)