User talk:Yingpun/sandbox

Hi Yingpun,

Your entry of Wong Wing v. United States looks great! Very interesting case.

Alex2018ALR (talk) 17:19, 11 May 2018 (UTC) Alex[reply]

Bluebook-enthusiast (talk) 22:32, 14 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Yingpun,

I reviewed the draft of the Wing Wong v. United States article that you have in your sandbox, and it looks great! It is majorly improved from the original stub. Your lead section is particularly strong. It is easy to understand and clearly outlines the importance of the case. I like that you state the issue and the holding at the outset.

I have a few suggestions for things that could be improved in your current draft. I understand that you are still in the early stages of working on this article, so forgive me if you would have gotten around to these additions in due course. In any event, here are my suggestions:

I recommend adding more secondary sources. You are currently only citing to The Geary Act and the case itself. Given the apparent importance of the case, I assume there are numerous textbooks, law review articles, and treatises that may discuss the case.

You might also consider adding additional substantive sections. For example, you could include a brief discussion of the subsequent jurisprudence or the attention the case received from the news media at the time. NY Times or the Detroit Free Press might be places to check for articles.

I hope these suggestions are helpful. Good luck adding content and polishing the article!

Best, Bluebook-enthusiast

Comments[edit]

Hi Yingpun,
This is a great start! Your draft is already a vast improvement to the current article on the case. I especially appreciate your clear and succinct lead summarizing both the context of the case and its holdings. I also think that the way you have outlined the article seems clear and well-organized. One thing that did not have a separate sub-heading that I am interested in knowing more about is the factual background of the case. I see that you have a bit about it right under the main case heading but I think this perhaps could also be its own subsection and go more in depth. Another thing I am interested in knowing more about (and that perhaps could also have its own subsection) is the broad effect of the case moving forwardMonfredo (talk) 23:40, 14 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]