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Kazi Nazrul Islam[edit]

Hi - I know this article needs some copyediting and might have some other issues, but I'm sure any poignant criticism will only be obtained here, so I submit this article to your attention and ask for your input and support. Rama's arrow 00:38, 23 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Quick comment: Sarat Chandra wasn't a poet, rather a noverlist.--ppm 00:51, 23 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  1. Please mention who has translated that version of Bidrohi and that it is only the first two stanzas and not the entire poem. Having the Bangla beside it, if possible would be useful IMO
  2. IMO article should link out to Nazrulgeeti with a redirect page from Nazrul Sangeet, formal accepted terms in West Bengal and Bangladesh for the body of songs written and composed by Nazrul.
  3. How many songs did he compose? As far as I am aware, there is no "complete works" of his songs because in the latter stages of his life many of his compositions were not credited to him. Please check up on this, since I am going off of word-of-mouth from Dhiren Basu, a proponent of Nazrulgeeti.
  4. A word on the enormous year-long centennial birth celebrations in West Bengal and Bangladesh in 1999 would be useful in the legacy section.
  5. Is there a bibliography or select bibliography? Would be useful IMO.
  6. What illness was Nazrul suffering from? Is there a diagnosis to be found anywhere?
  7. Didn't Nazrul act, in, direct, and sing for Bhakto Dhrubo? Please check up and cite if I'm correct. --Antorjal 02:34, 23 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Reply to Antjoral

  1. Done - working on the Bangla suggestion.
  2. Done
  3. In "Later career" the figure given is roughly 2,600 songs. I couldn't find a full list or tally for his songs. You are correct that some works have not been credited, or even discovered yet. The article mentions this already, while giving a rough estimate of the number songs he composed.
Sorry I had missed that number. Thanks for replying.
  1. See Complete Works of Kazi Nazrul Islam - a fork that is linked thru the template. Since the editors opted against a bibliography for Satyajit Ray, I'll have to say that it won't be useful to write those here, especially as they could expand to hundreds of works.
Excellent. Works brilliantly without hogging bandwith. Thanks.
  1. The article section "Illness and Later Life" mentions that Nazrul was possibly suffering from syphilis, but that this was not officially diagnosed.
Yes. I had heard the unofficial version too. Just making sure that I had heard correctly. Thanks for the cite.
  1. I couldn't find any data on the net for "Bhakto Dhrubo." Rama's arrow 23:10, 24 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Quoted from the Banglapedia article. I'm sorry for my transliteration scheme which doesn't match Banglapedia's. :) "In 1934 Nazrul became associated with motion pictures. The first picture for which he worked was based on girish chandra ghosh's story Bhakta Dhruva (1934). Nazrul acted in the role of Narada, directed the film, composed songs for it, set them to music and directed them. He also did playback singing for four of Narada's songs. Of the 18 songs of the picture, Nazrul composed 17. He was also associated with other motion pictures such as Patalpuri (1935), Graher Pher (1937), Vidyapati (Bangla and Hindi, 1938), Gora (1938), Nandini (1945) and Abhinay Nay (1945)."
Comments Have not read the whole article. Just a few comments:
  1. "...he is widely popular and revered in India" Is he? I doubt! Any ref?
  2. Have added Neurosyphilis bit in the lead. Please see if the addition is ok.
  3. Wikify Kumudranjan Mallik, Asansol, Trishal, preferably Bengal Regiment.--Dwaipayan (talk) 16:12, 25 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Reply to Dwaipayan I have two links which briefly talk about commemorations of Nazrul in India[1],[2]. But taking your point, I've removed some words to make a more sober assessment. Yes the addition is ok, and will wikify the red links soon. Rama's arrow 16:27, 25 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  1. just making sure "where he became the first Muslim poet to create imagery and symbolism of Muslim historical figures" -- is this claim within Bengal or global?
  2. with all due respect, "singla handedly" cannot be attributed to "liberating poetry and literature in Bengali from its medieval mould"
  3. "Often compared to Rabindranath Tagore' sophisticated style, Nazrul's poetry is regarded as rugged but unique." -- somehow this sentence doesn't work. The next sentence "Not striving to rival Tagore's standing, Nazrul's use of Persian vocabulary widened the scope of his work" is interesting, as this is the criticism section, this issue caused quite a schism amond the two great poets (I haven't read the whole article, so it might already be there).--ppm 21:06, 25 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Reply to Shmitra

  1. This claim is according to what Serajul Islam Choudhary wrote in his article, which is the source for this statement.
  2. I've removed the words "almost single-handedly."
  3. In none of the sources have I read of a "schism" between Nazrul and Tagore - disagreements yes, but no "schism." I have rectified the sentence structure. Rama's arrow 21:36, 25 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]


  • Support well written. Pls check for mild pov:
  1. "However, his descriptions of women do not exceed beyond softness and homely roles"
  2. "Nazrul worked with intense focus and determination."
  3. "greatest modern exponents of Shaktism," -- on this one, the citation link seems broken. I am not doubting his affiliations with the Shaktamot, indeed I am well aware of it, but "greatest" needs some more justification.--ppm 18:03, 28 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
I think I've addressed your concern. Rama's arrow 02:27, 29 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support Nice work. Rlevse 02:09, 2 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support Great work by Rama's arrow. --Ragib 02:13, 2 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Object: Sorry about the delay in getting to this:
  • I don't see the need for alternating between past tense and conditional to express things that happened in the past—instead of saying "Nazrul would also condemn Muslim religious fundamentalism", why not say "Nazrul also condemned Muslim religious fundamentalism"? Many examples of this.
  • Punctuation goes outside of short quotes (I fixed a few of these)
  • Poem titles shouldn't be italicized; they should be in "quotes". Speaking of italics, only italicize foreign words, not their translations into English. So namaz (prayer), not namaz (prayer).
  • — (either surrounded by spaces or not) is a better choice for a dash than –, and is far superior to a hyphen.
  • I've played around with the first paragraph of "Religion" but I'm hopelessly confused. We have the death of his mother and son, and then we have the success of his songs. What's the connection? Do any sources explicitly suggest that these deaths pushed him into this area? If not, delete the info on his family as irrelevant. I also don't like the implication that's along the lines of "he was impacted by the death of his son, even though his wife had two other sons"—generally someone is impacted by the death of a child, regardless of how many more children he has.
  • Having real difficulty parsing this one: "Nazrul identifies two main trends – of passionate devotion and exploration of Earth, the origin and home environment of human beings; the second of attempts to rise above and out of Earth to explore and reach the skies, or heavens". What are all of those lone "of"s? Is "passionate devotion" distinct from "Earth" or is it "passionate devotion... of Earth"? The comma between "Earth, the" is confusing. Also, pick either skies or heavens and go with it—both are English, and mean practically the same thing.
  • British vs. American spelling—I've found a few examples of inconsistencies; there may be more.
  • What's the connection between all these thoughts (and "work catapaulted his fame" needs to be reworded):
  • In these final years of activity, Nazrul worked with determination. His work catapaulted his fame across India. However, Nazrul condemned the adaptation of his songs to music composed by others and insisted on the use of tunes he composed himself. His music programmes gained great popularity and reached a broad audience. In this period, Nazrul expressed complete opposition to Muslim separatism and the Two-Nation Theory.
Hope this helps. Other than these examples, most of this looks pretty good. --Spangineeres (háblame) 21:43, 5 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you for your valuable input. I've addressed (I think) all your points. Please give a fresh assessment. Rama's arrow 22:58, 5 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Nice job. Support. --Spangineeres (háblame) 23:03, 6 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
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