Wikipedia:Featured article review/Denis Law/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article review. Please do not modify it. Further comments should be made on the article's talk page or at Wikipedia talk:Featured article review). No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was removed 13:08, 12 November 2007.

Denis Law[edit]

Review commentary[edit]

Notified Football, Scotland and Biography wikiprojects. Also contacted User talk:Cantthinkofagoodname (original nom and by far main contributor) although seems to be inactive.

I believe this article made it to WP:FA over two years ago when perhaps the criteria weren't so strict. I can see problems with lack of citation, failures to comply with the manual of style, lack of images, poor and choppy prose and problems with POV. The Rambling Man 11:46, 24 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I think it fails 1a in that it is not that well written. I don't think it is very comprehensive. The early life section is very small as are his early clubs sections. It needs citations, especially for his early life. It fails criteria 3 in that it has no images. There are some little MOS fixes needed but i think Oldelpaso has fixed some of these including ndashes. It needs some work but i dont think it is beyond repair. Woodym555 16:24, 24 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

FARC commentary[edit]

Suggested FA criteria concerns are prose (1a), referencing (1c), MoS issues (2), and images (3). Marskell 19:27, 13 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Ugh, if anyone is working on this, please correct all the ibids (see WP:FN). Prose needs attention, this is just offensive: As of July 2005, he is still married to Diana,... (Still ?) Without any context for this one-sentence para, it looks like trivia: On November 25, 2005, Law was at the bedside of former United team-mate George Best as he died of multiple organ failure. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 01:32, 7 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Delist - 1a - written in informal manner like a newspaper or sport magazine. Blnguyen (bananabucket) 01:08, 8 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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