Wikipedia:Featured article review/Goa/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article review. Please do not modify it. Further comments should be made on the article's talk page or at Wikipedia talk:Featured article review). No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was removed 12:58, 20 August 2007.

Goa[edit]

Review commentary[edit]

Messages left at Indian states Project, Goa Project, Goa, India related topics, and Nichalp.--Dwaipayan (talk) 08:33, 16 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Messages left at Graham87, Aarozone and Fredericknoronha

I believe the article doesn't satisfy criteria 1(a) and 1(c)/2(d). The prose is not up to the standard it can be. There are plenty of one-sentence paragraphs. There is even a one-sentence section. Goa#Telecom. Furthermore, the article is quite weak on citations/references, especially when they are needed, such as statistical data. Fact tags are scattered throughout the article. Gizza^Discuss ^© 05:32, 16 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Last reviewed version: this is the version of the article that survived a FAR in May 2005. Although it has the same citation issues as the present one, it does seem less bloated. May make a useful reference. Abecedare 05:51, 16 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

The article lacks inline citations, MOS, redlinks (though not a criteria), overall copyedit is necessary. To be frank, I will rate the article not more than a start grade article. This article must be improved or get defeatured. Remove the excess photos in Economy section.Amartyabag ^TALK2ME 11:48, 16 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

FARC commentary[edit]

Suggested FA criteria concerns are prose (1a) and citations (1c). Marskell 07:32, 4 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Remove, some work was done, but the article is not within 1c guidelines. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 19:57, 16 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Remove per 1c. LuciferMorgan 23:58, 16 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Remove—poorly written. In particular, tons of redundant wording (the first sentence, for example, could lose four words; the second, three words). Tony 23:57, 18 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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