Wikipedia:Featured article review/Mordechai Vanunu/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article review. Please do not modify it. Further comments should be made on the article's talk page or at Wikipedia talk:Featured article review). No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was removed 19:12, 17 June 2007.

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Mordechai Vanunu

Review commentary

Messages left at User talk:Wally, Biography, Science and academia, Isreal and Morocco. LuciferMorgan 18:55, 13 May 2007 (UTC) Additional messages at Politics and Political figures. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 20:56, 16 May 2007 (UTC)

This article was promoted way back in 2004 and has changed a lot since then, although it may now cover a lot more detail, it is not of a featured quality. The quality of prose is not of a high standard, filled with one abrupt one sentence paragraphs. The flow is not good enough, for example, why is a seemingly trivial sentence on Microsoft handing over information on Vanunu's email accounts in the lead paragraph? (although other than that the WP:LEAD paragraph is OK) The entire Human Rights section is comprised of choppy unrelated paragraphs, all of which lack sourcing, failing WP:A. Other minor details include cleaning up external links, and making sure fair use images include an adequate rationale and sourcing. - hahnchen 18:16, 13 May 2007 (UTC)

FARC commentary

Suggested FA criteria concerns are prose (1a), focus (4), citations (1c), and formatting issues (2). Marskell 09:17, 29 May 2007 (UTC)

• Remove per 1c. There are a lot of quotes which need citing. LuciferMorgan 11:26, 5 June 2007 (UTC)
• Remove, cite needed tags, imbedded and unformatted links, numerous one-sentence paragraphs, and not a single edit since article was nominated for review except my fix of the footnotes and one vandal revert; nothing happening. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 20:22, 16 June 2007 (UTC)

The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article review. No further edits should be made to this page.