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Akshay Kumar filmography[edit]

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Nominator(s): Skr15081997 (talk) 14:41, 18 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured list because this list provides comprehensive information about Akshay Kumar's films. He has starred in more than 120 films so far in his two decade long career. I expect constructive comments from the reviewers. This is my 1st FLC so please don't be too harsh to me. Skr15081997 (talk) 14:41, 18 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comment I took the liberty to fix the tables so that it meets FLC. Probably still needs a bit of work. The lead however needs a significant copyedit/rewrite by someone well-versed in Bollywood as the prose is lacking. @Krimuk90:, you're an expert on these kind of articles. Are you up for fixing up the lead for this list? Cowlibob (talk) 12:04, 10 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I agree. The lead needs a major rewrite. I'll see what I can do. -- KRIMUK90 ✉ 06:55, 11 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Comment Isn't Hari Om Entertainment Akshay Kumar's production company? Doesn't that mean that he has co-produced more films than listed in his filmography? -- Sriram speak up 17:32, 19 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Kumar's company had produced the films but he was not credited as the film's producer. Shah Rukh Khan filmography also lists the films produced by Red Chillies with the explanatory note that SRK wan't credited as the film's producer. I hope I have resolved your comment.--Skr15081997 (talk) 06:24, 20 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
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  • The sources provided don't mention that the first film that he had signed was Deedar. So why is it mentioned before his first role?

Citations added.

  • You don't "have" success, you "achieve" success.

Corrected.

  • "..promoted Kumar as one of the most successful actors of the year". How about "established Kumar as one..."

Thanks, you always give the best suggestion.

  • The fact that he played action roles in the 90s appears in between his credits for 1994. Why?

Moved to the appropriate place (I think so!)

  • In the second paragraph, why mention some of his 1994 credits that have already been mentioned in the first paragraph? Also, there is no need to mention all his releases.

Removed all of them.

  • "declared a hit". By whom?

Resolved (I think so!)

  • "However, his later films...". 'Later' is very vague. During which period did his films not do well?

Changed.

  • "He had given 14 flop films in a row before acting in Jaanwar". Very jarring due to the sudden change in tense.

Changed.

  • "..after the long spell of flop films". Not quite encyclopaedic.

Removed.

  • "After 2000 he changed from action genre to drama, romantic, negative and comedy" How can someone change to a "negative genre"?

Removed.

  • "With Garam Masala, Akshay surpassed Shahrukh Khan and Salman Khan on the box office for the first time." Surpass in regards to what?

Added " in terms of box office collection".

  • " His success had soared in 2007.." Poor grammar, and replace "soared" with a better word.

Changed.

  • "hit films" sounds like a newspaper report. Use something like a box office hit, or a commercial success etc.

Done.

  • "By playing these roles he avoided being typecast as an action actor." Source?

Removed.

  • " Apart from feature films it had also produced a global warming based documentary.." Ehhm... "he" and not "it" please.

Necessary changes made.

  • Rowdy Rathore and Housefull 2 were critically successful? Source?

Added.

  • Why is "Breakway" suddenly not in italics?

Fixed.

  • "On 16 February 2013, many media outlets reported that the box office collection of Kumar's films had crossed 2000 crore (US$330 million) and till date is the only Bollywood actor to do so." Again, jarring tense changes.

Rephrased the latter part.

  • The final four-five sentences aren't quite up to the standards of a featured list, so I won't comment on those.

Working.

Okay, these comments are just the tip of the iceberg. The prose has many more issues. Since this is your first nomination, I understand that it is very difficult to get it right in one go. I, therefore, strongly suggest that you open a peer review before nominating this again. Cheers! -- KRIMUK90 ✉ 15:01, 28 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

@Krimuk90:Thanks for thoroughly inspecting the lead. Awaiting further comments!--Skr15081997 (talk) 14:23, 29 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]


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