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1986 Pacific hurricane season[edit]
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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to get this article to GA status. YE Pacific Hurricane 16:33, 10 December 2011 (UTC)
- Comments
- Lead is quite brief, per WP:LEAD.
- "producing $2 million damage and 2 " -> "causing $2 million damage and two deaths"
- "They were four notable storms this year." grammar fail.
- "most notably Estelle.[3][1]" refs in the right order please.
- Agatha - "One-E becomes " became.
- Agatha - too many sentences beginning "Agatha..." more variety for elegant writing please.
- Celia - same comment. In general, use some other terms, e.g. "the hurricane" when it's obvious you're talking about Celia etc.
- Darby - "40 mph (60 mph)." hmm?
- Darby - "began to a weakening trend" I don't understand this.
- Estelle - " veered to west" -> to the west.
- Estelle - "two drowning" +s.
- Frank - "1800 UTC July 23" on July 23.
- Frank - AOR is a dab link.
- Georgette - "23-45 mph (37-75 km/h)" en-dash required for both these ranges.
- Georgette - "it's peak intensity as Typhoon Georgette. [3][1]" (a) "its peak", (b) remove the space before the refs, (c) order refs numerically.
- Isis v Javier - any reason why one is Imperial (metric) and the other metric (Imperial)?
- Javier - "Javier had weaken directly" +ed
- Javier - "Javier weaken into a depression" +ed
- Javier - "a dangerous hazard" hazards are dangerous so you don't need to say dangerous.
- Javier - "collided with an" I think you mean coincided?
- Newton - "minimal pressure" minimum?
- Yea. YE Pacific Hurricane 18:35, 8 June 2012 (UTC)
- Newton - "20,000 customers" customers?!
- Yea. YE Pacific Hurricane 18:35, 8 June 2012 (UTC)
- Paine - "flooding from Paine worsened flooding issues; the flooding" flooding x 3 is repetitive.
- "the final advisory was issued.[1][26][3]" ref order.
- "was issued.[26][3]" ditto.
- "600 UTC" -> 0600 UTC
- Fixed. YE Pacific Hurricane
- UTC is overlinked in the other storms section.
- Fixed. YE Pacific Hurricane
- Why is just Paine and Roslyn linked in the other storms section?
- Don't mix date formats in the refs.
- Newspaper refs should have page numbers were applicable.
- Ensure spaced hyphens and page ranges use an en-dash instead.
- Tool is showing a couple of bad links.
The Rambling Man (talk) 11:48, 15 December 2011 (UTC) Wow, thanks for bothering to return.... The Rambling Man (talk) 18:38, 8 June 2012 (UTC)