Wikipedia:Peer review/A Streetcar Named Marge/archive1
A Streetcar Named Marge[edit]
The page is modeled after the various Simpsons episode FAs and I think this page is looking pretty good, although some of the prose could be better. -- Scorpion0422 03:56, 7 September 2007 (UTC)
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at Wikipedia:Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.[?]
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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, DTGardner 21:04, 10 September 2007 (UTC)