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I've listed this article for peer review because I think it needs general review.

Thanks, Kozuch (talk) 12:21, 13 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

Check the use of hyphens per WP:DASH.
Ensure all citations, where appropriate, use {{cite web}} and contain as much information as possible.
For an article this size, I would expect considerably more than 28 citations (e.g. second para of History is citation-less)
Resolve the merge tag.
Write the Player section as prose, not bullet points.
Same with authoring tool.
And both sections need references for their various claims.
"which wants to drive rich Internet experiences and create a consistent application interface across" reads like an advert to me.
" Some developers reported the actual licences missing from the project documentation, but Adobe stated to address the issue." - actual is redundant, and should it be "started"?
Programming language section is reference-less and needs to be worked on for prose - it's currently like bullet points without the bullets.
"Since The Arrival of the..." - whoa, over caps...
Deal with the citation needed template.
Avoid in-line linking.

This is quite some way from GA right now, I'd suggest a thorough set of references are added and that the entire article be copyedited. Try the league of copyeditors... All the best, The Rambling Man (talk) 16:49, 19 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]