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Anthony Stokes (footballer)

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I've listed this article for peer review because I want an outside perspective on how it can be improved.

Thanks,  Sunderland06  19:29, 22 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

• Expand the lead per WP:LEAD.
• Done Football (soccer) has now become Association football so when you get the chance, prevent the redirect.
• Done Use en-dash for scorelines per WP:DASH
• Add some information on his life before professional football.
• Done Place citations immediately after punctuation where possible per WP:CITE.
• Changed to, "their Fife rivals" "their bitter Fife rivals" - POV.
• Done Merge short paragraphs - two sentences don't really make a para.
• Remove the trivia section - flow the details into the main prose.
• Done Ensure all dates are formatted per WP:DATE (so avoid things like 1st..)
• Expand the references to include the accessdate= parameter.
• Done Be consistent in the way you reference the BBC, you've got four different ways of doing it right now.

That should help! The Rambling Man (talk) 19:50, 22 March 2008 (UTC)