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Looking to get this one featured some time in the near future. I think it's fine in terms of content (anyone familiar is welcome to prove me wrong), but any comments on how the prose is and how it can be improved would be great. (Of course, all comments are good!) Cheers, Giggy (talk) 12:47, 17 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
  • Good start, this should be quick...!
  • I spot at least one hyphen in the references - en-dash for page ranges.
  • Baroque pop doesn't need to have a capital P for Pop.
  • "failed to sell." - entirely? Can you quantify it?
  • "minimal sales or chart figures" - odd phrasing - minimal chart figures (i.e. low numbers) are good aren't they? You know what I mean? And I would imagine both are the case, rather than one or the other.
    • Oh, yes, you're right, I never thought of that. Adjusted.
  • " They soon found themselves signed to BMG." wistful indeed but dubious - I suspect they actively participated in this deal!
    • Heh, indeed. Adjusted. Giggy (talk) 09:53, 20 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "friend of Richards'" - apostrophe required?
    • Probably not. Australian speech seems to apply ownership (in the apostrophe sense) to friends, but I that's probably not correct when written. Giggy (talk) 09:53, 20 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Images are odd sizes with respect to each other.
    • Yeah... they're somewhat odd sized. I'll play around in there and see if I can make it look better. Giggy (talk) 09:53, 20 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The Rambling Man (talk) 09:35, 20 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks very much! Giggy (talk) 09:53, 20 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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