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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to see other editors feedback to get this article to FA status. I've worked hard on this article (obviously) and have brought it up to GA status. I've used up all links I could find (books, magazine articles, websites, etc.) to get great info for Batman. I have very few things to look at (such as DVD special features). Anyway I need your opinion. Should I add any "Themes" or pictures or what?

Thanks, Wildroot (talk) 20:38, 11 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments-Good article (obviously). Here's how you can make it an FA (very brief and shallow runthrough):

  • Expand the stubby, one-sentence paragraphs or combine them with others (I'm talking about the legacy section).
  • Is there any reason that the ISBN of Batman: Strange Application is included in the body of the text?
  • "In the late 1970s, Batman's popularity was waning." I don't like to be the verification police for every single statement, but according to whom or what statistic was Batman's popularity waning?

I'll have more comments later. Dabomb87 (talk) 02:27, 16 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for reviewing. I tend to include the ISBN of a book/novel/comic book if it doesn't have its own Wikipedia article. I don't really know why I do that. Producer Michael Uslan made that comment of Batman's popularity waning in the late 1970s. I will get to work on the Legacy section. —Wildroot (talk) 05:28, 16 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • Could you provide a source in the article thay verifies that Michael Ulsan says that quote?
  • "The film would eventually gross $251.2 million in North America and $160,160,000 in foreign countries, coming at a total of $411.35 million." Make all numbers written in the same format. Also, "coming at a total of" can be shortened to "totaling".
  • "To compose the film score Burton opted to hire Danny Elfman, his collaborator on Pee-wee's Big Adventure and Beetlejuice." A simpler sentence would be:"Burton hired Danny Elfman, his collaborator on Pee-wee's Big Adventure and Beetlejuice, to compose the film score." In general, the text needs a thorough copyedit before FAC. To me, the most pressing problems are awkward sentence structures and redundant wording.
  • Ideas for images include: props, behind-the-scenes pictures, film posters, and pictures of cast members.
  • Fix overlinking (mostly words and phrases linked multiple times). Dabomb87 (talk) 22:25, 16 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Comments from Matthewedwards (talk · contribs)
  • I just wanted to leave a comment here that if you're interested I have a People Weekly from July 3 1989 with a review of the movie and an article about the Hollywood Premiere. Leave me a note on my talk page and I will either email you the stories or paste lines into the article's talk page.

Matthewedwards (talk • contribs • email) 19:33, 18 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Bzuk Comments Overall, the article reads well, and my comments are to address mainly minor points:

  1. Referencing: The use of APA (American Psychological Association) style is used but with some inaccurate notations. Author is written as last name, first name with second and following authors/editors appearing as first name, last name. ISBN is a book identification code for booksellers and is not used normally in a citation. Citations should include Author, date and page number in sequence, followed by a full stop.
  2. Minor spelling, grammar: The phrase, "over the tone and direction the film was going in" could be written as "over the tone and direction in which the film was going." The phrase, "but Englehart had mixed emotions with his work" could be "but Englehart had mixed emotions in regards to (in respect to, over) his work." The phrase, "The car was built upon a Chevrolet Impala" could be "The car was built on a Chevrolet Impala chassis." The one use of foot is most often written as "a 38-ft (12 m) model." Note there is a mix of two different quotation styles.

FWiW Bzuk (talk) 04:16, 22 August 2008 (UTC).[reply]

Comments from Ealdgyth (talk · contribs)

Hope this helps. Please note that I don't watchlist Peer Reviews I've done. If you have a question about something, you'll have to drop a note on my talk page to get my attention. (My watchlist is already WAY too long, adding peer reviews would make things much worse.) 19:39, 22 August 2008 (UTC)
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