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CS gas[edit]

I have recently re-written this article completely and would appreciate any improvements or feedback peope would care to give. I would like to get the article classed as a Good articles, it's not anywhere close to an FA... Cheers SeanMack 03:06, 26 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

The chemical synthesis and some chemical properties can be mentioned. Synthesis as I know starts from o-chlorbenzaldehyde and malonic acid nitril with a Knoevenagel condensation the CS is formed. Stone 10:29, 27 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks for the review - I've added some data from an american army webpage - so I'm assuming it's PD and therefore usable directly. It's been a while since I studied chemistry so I think I'd have to leave a more detailed picture so someone with more experience. I appreciate the time you took to have a look and make a suggestion. Kind regards SeanMack 17:19, 27 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Rather than a bulleted list of chemical properties, I'd like to see the page get a table similar to that found on the Acetic acid page, which was an FA. Thanks. — RJH 23:02, 28 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

The chemical property list (there is already a long list on the right side of the article)would be OK if the chemical abilities would be in the first place, but here the features of CS are more the point. May be a data subpage with chemical information will do. This is also done at the Acetic acid and othe chemicals pages. Stone 15:54, 1 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks you both for your comments. I invite you to check the page to see the changes I have implemented based on your feedback. Regards SeanMack 01:49, 4 March 2006 (UTC).[reply]
  • Single-paragraph sections are already considered poor layout. so single-sentence ones? Consider merging them in "Elsewhere"
  • "Production": Are there other ways it can be produced? Has it always been produced so? Who discovered the gas' properties? Can you buy it? Whatform is it usually found in? (spray cans?)
  • How does the gas act on the body (e.g. why, physiologically, is it so effective?)
  • Tear gas can remain stagnant in clothes and materials. There were complains in Quebec City after the Summit of te Americas there that several houses still stank of the stuff months after.
  • The image in "decontamination" looks randomly added just so there'd be a picture there.
  • Circeus 23:41, 16 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Will add some refs for synthesis on monday (Corbson JACS 1928 page 2825 and Pande Org Proc Res Devel 2005 page 133) stone also patent numers for industrial production!--Stone 10:40, 17 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

  • First the lead section should contain a summary of the whole article.
  • Chemical production I will upgrade.
  • Preparation should be renamed. To some what more specific. Should be also a full text.
  • Colourless gas when burned – unclear - better sublimation or heated.
  • History section with discovery and development and first use would also be good.
  • The effects on humans should also be have own section, like physiology effects or so. With references!
  • The section Non-lethal? Other title and the Uwe Heinrich paragraph can be short as the other ones.
  • The table has not the same style like the chemicals from the project:chemicals .

--Stone 20:48, 17 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Added new references for the long term effects of CS--Stone 19:51, 20 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

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