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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to get the article to GA status.

Thanks, AgnosticPreachersKid (talk) 12:37, 26 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: This is an interesting article and I think it is close to GA - here are some suggestions for improvement:

One of the GA criteria is that it "addresses the major aspects of the topic". The article seems to need expansion in the following areas:
- Since he seems to be most notable for being a mayor, there needs to be more details on his time in office, etc.
- Per WP:LEAD nothing major should be only in the lead - so this needs more explanation in the article about his being "the first popularly elected mayor of Raleigh"
- Also there is no real mention of his Honors and legacy in the lead - again all major topics in the article should be mentioned in the lead in some way.
The major omission seems to be a lack of information about his time as mayor - what were his maor accomplishments in office? Why did he only serve one term? Currently the only info on his time in office is that he was a member of "the Southern Conference of Black Mayors".
A few places in the article are unreferenced, but would need refs for GA - the paragraph on his marriage and children, or the paragraph where he is appointed to the state senate.
refs are good - can you find any other pictures- his grave or the building named for him?

Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 10:23, 29 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]