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Evansville Tornado of November 2005[edit]

Recently did a lot of additions and editing of this article, and I am wondering what else can be done for this to move towards becoming an FA. CrazyC83 02:35, 18 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Very nice short article. I have one nitpick though, since your sources (footnotes) are all websites, can you use the preferred Template:Cite web style? - Tutmosis 19:49, 19 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Okay I will. Is that everything? Can it make a serious FAC nomination as is? CrazyC83 23:38, 19 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
I would definetely go for it since no one else has any problems with it. Although I'm pretty sure the issue of the quality of the prose will come up. I'm no professional writer so I cant help you there. Anyway, good luck. - Tutmosis 01:56, 20 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Interesting read some thoughts/suggestions:-
From the lead "deadliest in Indiana since 47 died when several tornadoes hit the state during the Super Outbreak of 1974."
suggest "deadliest in Indiana since the Super Outbreak of 1974".
also from lead
"It was also the most deaths caused in a single day by tornadoes since 39 died on May 4, 2003 in Kansas, Missouri, and Tennessee during the May 2003 Tornado Outbreak Sequence. It was the deadliest single tornado since 36 were killed on May 3, 1999 from the Oklahoma Tornado Outbreak in the Oklahoma City area"
suggest
"It was also the most deaths caused in a single day by tornadoes since the May 2003 Tornado Outbreak Sequence. It was the deadliest single tornado since May 3, 1999 from the Oklahoma Tornado Outbreak."
The section "Confirmed tornadoes" reduce one level to subsection of "Meteorological analysis"
The table on the number of deaths looks out of place/cramped, maybe because theres not enough information

I'd say it would pass WP:GA as is but still needs some more work for FA Gnangarra 15:53, 20 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

  • Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Ruhrfisch 18:50, 21 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • The list of superlatives in the introductory paragraph is excessive. Kaldari 20:48, 21 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
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