Wikipedia:Peer review/Garrincha/archive1
Garrincha[edit]
Article about a Brazillian footballer. It has had a major re-write during the time it was the Football Article improvement drive (See Changes). What other changes does it need to have to get the article to featured standard? Kingjamie 12:09, 24 September 2006 (UTC)
- First of all, the facts with a [citation needed] tag have to be referenced. Punkmorten 12:42, 24 September 2006 (UTC)
This is by most considerations a good biography. I have some issues, though:
- He is considered one of the best dribblers in football history, and the best Brazilian player ever after Pelé. - by whom? For a statement as bold as that it is worth putting in whose opinion that is so that the reader can make up their own mind about the reliability of that statement.
- ...yet he still became one of the greatest players in football history - peacock term; tone it down, consider changing it to something more objective like ...a Brazilian twice World Cup-winning international or something like that.
- ...would often end on an accurate pass to a teammate in position to score. - Needs some sort of statistic to back it up, or at the very least examples of when he did so.
- ...became a symbol of the history of the club. - this sounds a little awkward. Maybe instead say he was one of the club's greatest or most well-known players, with a citation to back it up.
- The club career is quite short, considering he played 12 seasons for Botafogo, I'm sure more can be said about it. Did he have any particular standout seasons or games for the club? It doesn't quite match the quality of the international section.
- The article is not clear - did Garrincha play in his own farewell match in 1973? If not, consider moving it out of that section and into a Trivia section, or even a separate section entitled "Recognition and tributes" with other similar cases (e.g. his funeral and epitaph)
- Consider transwikiing the quotes over to Wikiquote.
Hope the above helps. Qwghlm 08:19, 30 September 2006 (UTC)