Wikipedia:Peer review/Germany/archive1

Germany[edit]

I would appreciate feedback on what specific aspects of this article need to be improved. In terms of length, is it still too long and if so in what sections. Do you believe that more sources are needed and in what sections? Do you have any other suggetions/comments regarding the article? TSO1D 15:40, 29 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

The history from 1990 to 2006 should get also a paragraph! The problems with reunification (Blühende Lanschaften). The end of the time were German soilders were only allowed to do anything when the country in war. There is enough for a few centences.--Stone 16:48, 29 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, I agree the last 16 years of Germany's history are virtually ignored in the history section. The main history article doesn't really cover this section too well either, though there is some information in History of Germany since 1945 that I will try to condense and add at the end. As for the problems with re-unification, I think most of those have already been addressed in the ecnomy and society sections. TSO1D 16:52, 29 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Is there any point in the "Further reading" section? While these books may be good to reference in citations, the random-looking choice in this section (a biography of Lucius D. Clay??) just makes the article look bad. Perhaps the talk page of History of Germany is the right place for this stuff, as source for citations there. Kusma (討論) 20:11, 29 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I agree, that section serves no useful purpose at the moment. I will move the sources to the talk page so that they might somehow prove useful if anyone wants to take a look at them. TSO1D 20:18, 29 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

The Miscellaneous links section is a bit odd, too. I think it can be safely removed, as long as the sisterlinks and Portal link stay on the page. The Portal contains a Topics box Portal:Germany/Topics. Kusma (討論) 20:25, 29 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I don't think the section should be removed altogether (for instance look at FA [{Belgium]] that has a similar section), but I tried to alter it a little. I renamed it "See Also" and reduced the number of links so that only those that are important directly relate to Germany as a whole remained. TSO1D 20:31, 29 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Geography section is listy and stubby and not very nice, compare country FA Canada, which has nice readable prose. Kusma (討論) 20:30, 29 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I agree the geography section needs to entirely rewritten and reformated. TSO1D 20:33, 29 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Intro needs work, too much about geography, not really summarizing the whole article, too much focus on the wrong details (Bonn-Berlin stuff). Kusma (討論) 21:18, 29 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ _t 22:59, 29 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
The worst of all sections is the Culture section. Just enumerations of names, no prose at all. Most editing activity in the Music section in the last year has centered on adding and removing Rammstein to the sentence mentioning Bach and Beethoven. Unfortunately I have no idea how such a vast topic as German culture can be reduced to a few sentences, but it should. Kusma (討論) 23:30, 29 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, and that will be the hardest one to fix. And I see that the main culture of Germany article doesn't have much more either. TSO1D 03:18, 30 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I see the German translation of the article has a good section on the subject, though perhaps a bit too lengthy. I'll probably translate part of that and use it instead of the text that's up now. TSO1D 03:35, 30 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

The section on "International rankings" should probably be removed. It would need to be converted into prose, but is then likely to be too detailed for the main national article. There may be place for the information at economy of Germany. --Stemonitis 14:08, 7 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I agree. TSO1D 20:44, 7 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]