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Half-Life 2: Episode One[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to bring it to FA status one day. Gary King (talk) 20:48, 14 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • Boy, don't sound so glum... "one day..." :P Images:
All done Gary King (talk) 21:13, 14 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
On a side note, you might want to beef up the rationales, especially the gameplay image- how does it increase our understanding fo the work? The barebones one-liner wouldn't satisfy Elco, so just be warned :P Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs (talk) 02:32, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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  • Can you add any more information to ref #29, such as author or page number? Same with ref #33, #41.
  • Otherwise, sources look good. –Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 02:25, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I don't have access to those at the moment. I'll see if I can, and then add them when I get them. Gary King (talk) 02:32, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "in and around the war-torn city of City 17" - avoid repetition of city. Giggy (talk) 21:06, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    Done Gary King (talk) 02:27, 16 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • I've done some light editing (rm overlinking, et al), and also left some inline comments. Check my edits; I had to edit an old copy offline, so I might have reverted some recent changes. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs (talk) 02:28, 16 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    Thanks, I'll look it over tomorrow (because I'm tired right now) and then get back to you on here. Gary King (talk) 03:51, 16 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    Alright I think I've addressed all of your concerns. Gary King (talk) 18:54, 16 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    Yeah, that looks better. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs (talk) 19:00, 16 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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