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History of poison[edit]

This article started out as a DYK back in April. Since then, it has been vastly improved and expanded, and gained GA status on May 22. User:Anonymous Dissident and I would like to know how to improve the article, specifically, what points might we want to expand to, if the present tone, quotations, and content are encyclopedic, or just a general review of the article. If there are any questions or concerns, please contact me or User:Anonymous Dissident. bibliomaniac15 An age old question... 02:00, 7 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks biblio, by the way, for creating the page. I hope we get some good feedback. Anonymous Dissident Utter 07:42, 7 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
A few observations: The lead section should be expanded to comply with WP:LEAD. Also, I notice at least two significant poison themes/stories that are not mentioned. Shakespeare's use of poison in his plays deserves at least a little mention, I think, as well as Socrates' death by poisoning in Greek History. Wrad 23:17, 7 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • I found this article difficult to read. There is a real problem with the flow of the article as a whole. It seems to be made up endless examples of poison mentioned in various times, with without enough analysis or context. This makes me think the article might simply need better quaility sources. The section "Borgia family" goes into too much depth for such a general article and writing is especially poor. Also the transitions betweens the sub-sections are either awkward or non-existent. Missing is a discussion of radiation poisoning. --BirgitteSB 14:20, 8 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]