Wikipedia:Peer review/Illmatic/archive3
Illmatic[edit]
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I've listed this article for peer review because I think that this is a great article. It was a featured one in the past, and I think this article totally deserves this. I hope it can become one again and just thought it might be an idea to place it hear, because it has lost his status for a reason and I think the criteria have changed since then. Now I'm just looking for your feedback concerning improvements in this article, so fell free to speak your mind!
Thanks, DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 16:03, 10 April 2009 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: , here are some suggestions for improvement.
- I would closely at the FAR which led to the article being delisted as an FA and make sure all of the concerns have been addressed - see Wikipedia:Featured article review/Illmatic/archive1
- There are 11 free images of Nas on Commons - they are from later than the recording of this album, but I think some of them could be used here - see here. I would imagine there are also free images of some of the guest artists, etc.
- The hardest criteria for most articles to meet at WP:FAC is 1a, a professional level of writing. This article needs some major ploishing to get to that level. As two examples, just in the lead "renown" is used where "renowned" is meant It features production from several renown hip hop artists, ... or from the lead again However, due its critical fame, Nas's subsequent work has been weighed against it, despite it serving as Nas's lowest-selling release. In 2001, the album was certified platinum by the RIAA. Some places here are not garammatical (due its critical fame) or are just awkward (despite it serving). These sentences also combine two ideas that are not necessarily related. So perhaps something like this would be better However, its critical fame has led to Nas's subsequent work being weighed against it. Despite it being Nas's lowest-selling release, in 2001, the album was certified platinum by the RIAA.
- The article still seems to overuse quotations and has real WP:NFCC concerns - does it really need five audio samples, two extensive quotes from lyrics, and two non-free images?
- I would look at some current album FAs for ideas - they can serve as model articles for examples to follow - see Wikipedia:Featured_articles#Music
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 12:17, 25 April 2009 (UTC)