Wikipedia:Peer review/Kumi Koda/archive1

Kumi Koda

I am looking to make this article informative to all interested in this singer. In order to accomplish that, I would like to know what changes I should make to the article, whether I should leave out certain details, reorganize the article, etc. Also, I would like to know what I can do for events in her career that were not documented by news sources (just due to her being virtually unknown).

-XaiTerran 02:22, 28 December 2006 (UTC)

Well documented, well linked to the other wikipedia entries; no comments there. Biography needs improvement, as she would have been 9 years old in 3rd grade (1989) and the biography doesn't resume until 2000. One question arrose for me while I was reading the article: Why did producers stick with her even though her singles continually flopped? -- Nictius 14:59, 4 January 2007 (UTC)

• Thank you! Not much is actually known about her before her big rise to stardom in 2005. We actually don't know well the details of her life; the biography about her life before being a singer is pretty much a summary of a show that did a special documentary on her life. And your question is a good question. We don't know either. It's been asked by many, many people. -XaiTerran 20:53, 6 January 2007 (UTC)

• I figured that might be the case, as I did a some light googling to see if I could find the info myself, no luck though. Maybe in the biography put a few lines about the gap and that the info is unknown? That way to the unfamiliar reader, the gap won't appear as hole or missing information. I read the Ayumi Hamasaki article and compared the two biography sections. So, that is the standard I was/am holding this article too. Good luck! -- Nictius 08:31, 7 January 2007 (UTC)

I would recommend finding someone to do a thorough copyedit of the article. There are a lot of minor problems with the writing. For example, I see at least one sentence fragment, album articles should be italicized (without quotation marks), and one of the headers is improperly spelled (US should be U.S.). Per WP:TRIV, the trivia section should be scrapped, and any useful information in it should moved to the main text of the article. Any fair use images on the page need fair use rationales (see WP:FURG for information on how to do that). —ShadowHalo 23:00, 16 January 2007 (UTC)

After just a brief look at it, I would say that the article is over-illustrated. Is it really necessary to include every album cover? How about just her best selling/critically aclaimed ones? Also the end of the article is just a lot of big lists. I don't know how other musician articles avoid this, but I advise you check some Featured Articles that feature musicians to get an idea. Nice work though. Keep it up! Bobo12345 05:41, 18 January 2007 (UTC)