Wikipedia:Peer review/Lion/archive1

Lion[edit]

A couple of editors (me included) have been sort of making improvements to this article in an attempt to get it to FA. Things are going pretty well, but we'd like to here the comments of some others impartial to the article. Suggested improvements, things that could be better referenced, better prose ideas... anything at all is greatly appreciated. Thanks -- Anonymous Dissident^Talk 02:12, 11 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Spebi's review

Add the parameter |small=yes to the protection template; this large banner at the top has a history of scaring away readers who come to the page to get information for a school project, or something similar. A large banner at the top of "Today's featured article" isn't the best form of welcoming newcomers with our slogan "anyone can edit".
- Y Done -- Anonymous Dissident^Talk 03:45, 11 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Either WP:LEAD or WP:SUMMARY, it states that the lead summary should not have citations, because the information to be cited will be cited later on in the article, as the lead summary is supposed to be a summary of the whole article.Carry on. –sebi 22:09, 11 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- No. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 19:28, 11 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Ugh! {{fact}} tags! Work hard to track down sources to replace those ugly, little things.
Conservation status: there is a big fat [#] external link in there, that I think was intended to be a citation; fix it. They appear again in Attacks on humans.
- Y Done -- Anonymous Dissident^Talk 03:48, 11 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Clean out External links section, looking carefully at each external link, and deciding whether the information it provides adds to the discussion.
Look at the current images in the article, and remove, I'd say about 1 or 2 of them. Otherwise, the article will start to get very cluttered easily, full of lion pictures. Also, rewrite the image captions, so they aren't as bland as some of them are right now. Example: "Male lion in the Ngorongoro Crater, Tanzania", you may want to specify what breed of lion this lion is (if it isn't just the standard lion breed).

You've done a great job at improving the article. I believe that all popular zoo animals should be brought up to featured articles, as they are among the most viewed articles on Wikipedia (mainly of school children completing assignments on zoo animals). Keep up the great work :) –sebi 02:39, 11 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Looks pretty decent overall. Finish up finding sources where the citation needed tags are. I am also interested in knowing more about maneless male lions. What is the cause of a lack of a mane? Is it heat, subspecies, diet related? How common are they (I have never heard of them). It might not be too easy to get more info on them, but here's a few links: [1], [2], [3], [4], (pdf file)--MONGO 17:28, 12 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the links. I'll take a look tomorrow. -- Anonymous Dissident^Talk 17:35, 12 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]