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I've made significant efforts to clean this list up and look forward to get it up to a higher quality. Before I go on to fix up a lot references which aren't formatted perfectly and write up any more character descriptions I would like any suggestions on improvements to the list. More specifically, comments on the structure of the list and what do, if anything, with those one-time appearance (Maximum Velocity / F-Zero AX) characters. Relisted peer review to generate a more thorough discussion. « ₣M₣ » 17:11, 16 May 2008 (UTC)

  • Well, it's certainly an interesting format. I have two concerns: first, it needs information on reception/merchandise to really be complete. Secondly, I'm unsure about half the references being from Allgame... Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs (talk) 23:41, 21 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: I have never heard of this game, but will try to give some suggestions for improvement, with an eye to what might be a problem at FLC:

  • The lead is completely unreferenced - in a list there needs to be refs in the lead, since much of this material is not repeated in the article.
  • Problem sentence ...which makes the series akin to something out of an American comic book. reads like original research without a cite, see WP:CITE and WP:NOR
  • Article needs a copyedit - one example is the caption The most characters to debut in a single game is F-Zero X which brought twenty-seven new characters into the franchise. should read something like The most characters to debut in a single game is twenty-seven, in F-Zero X.
  • Provide context - identify Takaya Imamura (as is done later in The producer, Shigeru Miyamoto, wanted more ...) See WP:PCR
  • Explain abbreviations the first time, so SNES would be Super Nintendo Entertainment System (SNES)
  • Who is Captain Falcon? IGN called Captain Falcon "one of the most important and recognizable characters from the franchise".[3]
  • First paragraph in Characters is uncited.
  • Since this is a list, why all the info on Captain Falcon?
  • A model article is often useful List of characters in Castlevania: Aria of Sorrow and Dawn of Sorrow is a FL, although a very different kind of list. List of cast members of The Simpsons or List of Harry Potter cast members might also give ideas.
  • Intro says four characters in the first game, but only three are in the list.
  • Are the Original descriptions just direct quotes? If so this seems to be CopyVio and a violation of "Fair Use" - see WP:FAIR USE
  • Small print is hard to read
  • Any reason why tables are not sortable?
  • Do the sources used meet WP:RS?
  • Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 03:48, 21 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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