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List of New York hurricanes[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I created it several months ago, completely rewrote it, and I would like to prepare it for a FLC in the not-too-distant furture. The article has had one PR, which received no comments.

Thanks, Juliancolton ^{(St. Patrick's day)} 13:32, 13 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by RJHall[edit]

It certainly looks comprehensive and well-cited, so good work there. I have a few comments that I hope are of some use.

Although it's not strictly necessary, you might briefly clarify some of the geography for your non-U.S. readers who may not be familiar with U.S. geography. For example, you can explain that New York and New England are states along the eastern seaboard of the U.S., the East Coast is the Atlantic coast of the U.S. and that Long Island and Manhattan are in the city of New York.
You are using spaced en-dashes where perhaps non-spaced em-dashes would be more appropriate. (I've seen objections during the FA process for just such issues.)
Could you explain what "New York has rarely been struck directly by hurricanes" means? Is that where the eye crosses the territory? What does "rarely" mean? Once a century?
You may want to avoid mixing past and present tense; something I've seen criticized during the FA process. For example, "A hurricane that is reported to have tracked parallel to the East Coast and impact New England and New York..." should be "impacted". "Several large ships crash into Governors Island as a result of powerful waves which are reported to have been generated by a tropical cyclone." -> "crashed". You might even want to use a consistent tense everywhere.
You're missing a period on the "August 19, 1788" entry. You may want to check the remainder of your punctuation.
Could you define what is meant by "deadly storms" in the article? I'm assuming that means those are storms that killed somebody in New York, but I think it needs clarification.
Would it be informative to list the number of hurricanes by category? At least for the period where they were rated.
Please run the page through a spelling and grammar checker then check for edit errors: "tress" should be "trees", for example.

Thank you!—RJH (talk) 19:03, 13 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

- Thank you very much for those comments, and I will fix those right away. Juliancolton ^{(St. Patrick's day)} 23:37, 13 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]