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List of State University of New York units

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to work it up to a WP:FL and need feedback on ways it can be improved.

Thanks, MBisanz ^talk 01:28, 6 April 2009 (UTC)

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs) Nice list overall. I'm an FLC reviewer, so doubtless you'll see me again soon. Because of this, I'll give general comments only:

• Check for unnecessary wordiness and redundancy:
  • "administration is located in Albany, New York," done
  • "Further, SUNY should not be confused" done
• At FLC, they like to see a summary of the list in addition to the background info (e.g., first / most recently built institution, which has the highest enrollment, etc.)
• Put em dashes (—) in the empty cells. done
• It's generally more appealing to center columns that contain figures. done
• The easter egg links in the "[Year] Founded" column are alright, but you should provide a note explaining where these links go; see List of New Jersey Nets head coaches as an example. done
• Per WP:LAYOUT, See also comes before References. done
• Per MOS, only the first word in section headers should be capitalized. done
• IMO, it's too much detail to put the websites in this list. Those should go in the main articles of the respective institutions. redid references
• Some of the "Founded" columns don't have references. redid references
• "New York State Education Department" Link? done

Dabomb87 (talk) 02:41, 14 April 2009 (UTC)