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Manchester United F.C.

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I've listed this article for peer review because it has recently undergone a period of quite rapid improvement. Aim is to get this article featured.

Thanks, Tomlock01 (talk) 21:15, 10 April 2010 (UTC)

• Comment by Sandman:

• The player records section needs proper citation going direct to the page in question.
• Is the division between first league and premier league customary? Why not first division ~ 18? You don't divide CL and European Cup trohpies? Uninformed readers might think that first division is the second tier in English football.
• Club officials need citation.
• Club captain has a different source than the corresponding on list of Man utd players.
• "In September 2006, a £56.5 million deal with current shirt sponsors AIG became the most valuable in the world" clarify please.
• " making it the biggest sponsorship deal in football history" this is not supported by source.
• "Ryan Giggs is the most decorated player in English football history."
• "who demanded a then unprecedented level of control over team selection, player transfers and training sessions."
• Avoid words like unprecedented unless it is in qoutes. You shldn't make that assertion yourself.
  • All in all, I'd go through all the facts again and find proper source.

ALL DONE! Tomlock01 (talk) 18:37, 11 June 2010 (UTC)

Comments from Casliber

I generally look at comprehensiveness first

• the Rivalries section is stubby. I'd add a sentence or two about the relationship with Man C (i.e. people like one and hate the other etc.)
• The lead needs a bit of buffing. I might have a go at that myself