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Manchester United F.C. season 2007-08[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would eventually like to get it to Featured standard, or GA class at the very least. Originally, the text in the Premier League section was just too long for one section, so I have split it into three subsections by date. My main concern with the article, however, is referencing. The content, I believe, is fine, I just need help identifying which statements need citation. Anyway, I look forward to your comments.

Thanks, – Pee Jay 18:50, 30 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Quick comment from Peanut4 (talk · contribs)

The referencing is very weak. FAC does not like poorly referenced paragraphs. There are great swathes of paragraphs unreferenced. My basic suggestion would be, if a reference exists, add one. Don't be scared of adding too many references.
- Since there are links to the match report for each match, do you think I should still put an inline citation next to any mentions of results in the prose? – PeeJay 21:17, 30 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - I understand how you've used the "Report" thing and have seen it on a lot of other football articles. But is this approved practice on GA or FA articles. I've created Bradford City A.F.C. season 2007-08 and have simply added a ref column to the match list, and added the same refs to the main body of the article. But if you stick with the report option, I wouldn't see any harm in using the same references in the text. Like I say, you can't have too many references, but you could easily be accused of having too few. Peanut4 (talk) 22:12, 30 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    - Are you talking about a ref for jst a mention of the result (e.g "Untied won the match 2-0") or a ref for a mention of stuff that happened in the match (e.g "United dominated in the first ten mins"). Buc (talk) 15:16, 16 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Secondly, if you do go for GAN or FAC, I'd wait until the end of June. I think most seasons articles are based round a calendar year of July 1-June 30. Peanut4 (talk) 20:42, 30 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Quick comment from ChrisTheDude (talk · contribs)

Surely there must be at least one image that could be added......? ChrisTheDude (talk) 08:20, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I've been having a look around for images, but all the free photos have usually been taken from what seems like the furthest row back at Old Trafford. – PeeJay 09:44, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - What about an image of Ronaldo? There's several free ones of him floating about and he was pretty integral to the season..... ChrisTheDude (talk) 11:31, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    - Good plan. I'll try to find one that was actually taken this season, but if all else fails I'll just get an older one. – Pee Jay 14:23, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

At a quick glance I can see a few issues with poor wording, POV statements and lack of references. Give this a copy edit before doing anything else.

A few examples

"but picked up quickly"
"a 6–0 thrashing"
"was considered the hero"
"season got off to a slow start"
"season got off to a slow start"
"They should have gone two up soon after"
"The referee, though, was not very receptive to Mascherano's protest, and gave him a second yellow card for dissent, sending him off.

With Liverpool down to ten men..." Why start a new prargragh here when your taling about the same game?

"And fail to win they did"

Will review it in more detail once the major problem have addressed. Buc (talk) 15:39, 16 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]