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Mark Stimson

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Hoping for a GA with this article, please let me know if there's anything I still need to work on..............

Thanks, ChrisTheDude (talk) 12:17, 3 September 2008 (UTC)

You might want to add a link to his Newcastle United profile at [1] --Daemonic Kangaroo (talk) 13:34, 3 September 2008 (UTC)

Done -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 14:42, 3 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments by Jameboy (talk · contribs)

• disambiguate Plaistow x2
• [[Queen's Park Rangers F.C.|Queen's Park Rangers]] should be [[Queens Park Rangers F.C.|Queens Park Rangers]] x2. The redirect in itself is acceptable, but the club name must be rendered correctly in the article, i.e. no apostrophe.
• I can't see a source that says that Millwall were interested in his services as manager(?) (The BBC article mentions only Gillingham and Vale)
• His playing career (19 years) is given similar coverage to his managerial career (5 years) - just an observation really, I'm not meaning to imply recentism, but I was wondering if any more info could be added to his playing career? (although not just for the sake of it, obviously)

That's all I have for now. --Jameboy (talk) 15:48, 6 September 2008 (UTC)

• • I'll sort out the first three points ASAP. As for the last one, maybe his managerial career needs to be trimmed slightly but to be honest I couldn't really find much else to say about his playing career. He was very much a "journeyman" player who achieved very little of note (he didn't play in any "major" matches, set any records, or really do any especially noteworthy. I don't think the greater emphasis on his managerial career is a case of recentism, there's just much more to say! :-) -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 19:53, 6 September 2008 (UTC)