Wikipedia:Peer review/Nisi Mac Niata/archive1

Nisi Mac Niata

I've listed this article for peer review because I have improved the article quality so would like rating to be reviewed. Its my first wikipedia article!

Thanks, Nmclough (talk) 18:11, 24 August 2016 (UTC)

Comments by David Fuchs

{{doing}} Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs^(talk) 21:17, 19 October 2016 (UTC) Hey, sorry for the long delay. Things got crazy in the real world. Anyhow, some thoughts on the article:

• The use of Irish templates for proper nouns in this gets kind of out of hand and interferes with reading. I would strongly suggest axing them and putting wikilinks where crucial, because this is the English Language encyclopedia.
• Likewise, there's extensive use of italics, and it confuses things rather than making it clear. Are they being used for foreign words, emphasis, or all of the above? See MOS:ITALIC for some guidance on this—probably the biggest takeaway is don't use quotation marks along with italics for emphasis.
• For such a short article, it's very dearly missing some context that makes the text flow better and contextualizes just why this person is worth an article. The article mentions He was probably a close associate of Caillin, as they were siblings in the same Túath, and travelling companions when Nisi died. yet doesn't tell me who Caillin is, and doesn't mention anything about the possible dates when he died. If some of this info is missing, then it's probably best to tell the reader so they aren't feeling like they're missing the complete story. As it is, the article says they stayed at a guy's house and he killed him, with no indication as to why that was or if anything happened to him afterwards.
• Attribute quotes when you use them, such as This patronage would help the viability of "a famous monastic settlement at Fenagh". If it's not important who said it reword the sentence to remove it.
• When was the Book of Fenagh written?
• File:E124055.jpg seems like it's being use for extraneous decorative purposes (it's not actually the subject getting brained with the axe.) I don't necessarily think you can't have this image, but it probably shouldn't be in the infobox and should be more clearly labeled so people aren't confused about what it depicts.

Overall it could use a prose overhaul and some additional information to assist readers who aren't intimately familiar with Irish folklore or terms. --Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs^(talk) 23:51, 11 November 2016 (UTC)