Wikipedia:Peer review/Pocahontas/archive1

Pocahontas

I have been trying to improve this page by adding references for every statement made. I would appreciate any ideas about further ways to improve the page. The Singing Badger 17:05, 17 May 2006 (UTC)

• After a quick skim, I would suggest working on those red links. There are probably a few too many. Also, since you have many inline refs to a few sources, I would suggest putting full citations in a ==References== section, and doing short inline citations a la J. R. R. Tolkien. More for neatness than any policy. - The Catfish 20:53, 17 May 2006 (UTC)

• • Thanks, that's a much more efficient citation system; I'll work on it. The Singing Badger 21:30, 17 May 2006 (UTC)

• The article is broken into far too many sections, which increases the length of the table of contents and makes the text disjointed and more difficult to read.--Peta 05:03, 18 May 2006 (UTC)

• Per WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.

• Per WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.

• This article is a bit list-weighty; in other words, some of the lists should be converted to prose (paragraph form).

• Images need proper image copyright tags and source information. Specifically, Image:Pocahontas original.jpg need(s) proper image copyright tags.

• Per WP:WIAFA, Images should have concise captions.
• The article has a few or too many inline external links, which hamper the readibility of the article. Please convert them to footnotes, preferably in the cite.php format recommended by WP:WIAFA.

• There are a few sections that are too short and that should be either expanded or merged. For example, "The 'second rescue'", "Smith's departure", "Nature of the relationship" is/are a bit short.
• Thanks, AndyZ _t 22:26, 19 May 2006 (UTC)

Thank you! That's really helpful. The Singing Badger 19:22, 20 May 2006 (UTC)