Wikipedia:Peer review/Pope Pius XII/archive2

Pope Pius XII[edit]

Wikipedia:Peer review/Pope Pius XII/archive1

Ultimately, I'd like to see this article featured. The first peer review didn't get a lot of turnout, but the article has improved substantially since then. For such an important and controversial historial figure, the more eyes the better. If you know something about Pius, great; if not, you can still bring a pair of neutral eyes to the article. All comments would be much appreciated.

Also, a lot of non-english wikis have articles about him and if someone who could speak those languages could check for discrepancies or omissions that would be much appreciated as well. The foreign language articles also seem to have more rigorous copyright defenses of their images. savidan^{(talk) (e@)} 12:03, 3 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I'd make a few improvements:

extend the early life section
in Election and Coronation get rid of the 1 sentance paragraph
why did he consecrate the world to the Immaculate Heart of Mary?
the photo with the bird is nce, but can a better spot be found for it?
the address to the the Pontifical Academy of Sciences isnt an encylical.
what was the state of Japan with respect to WWII in 1942. Can you put the establishing of ties in a little more context?
when bombs fell on Rome, he gathered up all the money he could find in the vatican and went out into the crowds of people to distribute it. ive seen video of it, but theres nothing on it here.
a rabbi recently wrote a book in respoce to "hitlers pope" defending pius, i believe. theres no mention of it here.

good luck! Briancua 18:43, 12 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

One more - his coat of arms shouldnt be in the references section. Briancua 18:46, 12 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your comments. I started addressing these and will get back to you. savidan^{(talk) (e@)} 23:55, 12 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]