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Robbie Blake[edit]

I've requested a peer review for this article because i have recently spent a few days completely re-writing the article and I am now thinking about submitting it as a good article candidate. Thanks, Childzy ¤ Talk 23:17, 6 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Dont suppose a real person would have 5 minutes to browse through the article? The automated doesnt really help much. Thanks --Childzy ¤ Talk 22:01, 11 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

  • Be consistent when using F.C. e.g. He began his career with Darlington F.C in 1994 and has since gone on to play with larger Championship clubs including Burnley and Leeds United has "Darlington F.C" but "Burnley" and "Leeds United". Also, Darlington aren't/weren't a Championship club.
  • For references, use a template such as {{cite web}} instead of plain URLs.
  • Ensure a thorough spell check is performed - the first section has "Beginings" and "season's"
  • What type of striker is Blake? Is he a burly target man? A "fox in the box"?
  • Why did he go on loan to Forest?
  • Using so many quotes breaks up the flow a bit, particularly by putting them on separate lines.

*Moving up north to Burnley - A touch informal, and Burnley is almost due west of Bradford anyway. Green tickY--Childzy ¤ Talk 09:29, 15 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

  • Presumably Jewell made a bid at Wigan because he had worked with the player at Bradford.
  • A few sentences need breaking into two or more separate ones e.g. That summer long time Burnley manager, Stan Ternent, left the club and was replaced by Steve Cotterill and under the new manager Blake continued his prolific goal scoring with 13 goals in the run up to the January transfer window.

Hope this helps. Oldelpaso 11:58, 12 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]