Wikipedia:Peer review/SaarLorLux/archive1

SaarLorLux

I would like to improve the article and need some feedback. It would be nice if someone went through it and checked to see what needs to be done. Thank you kindly! --Thw1309 07:40, 27 June 2007 (UTC)

Some points:

• The terms 'Macroregion' and 'Euregio' have to either be explained in this article, have their own articles, or (preferably) the latter and and bit of the former. Here, SaarLorLux is defined as being something that Wikipedia doesn't define.

As you can see, I tried to construct definitions. I think, this will require some more reading, because in the end, both terms mean the same: land on both sides of a border. If you think it´s one piece of land with a border therein, it is an euregio and if you think, there are two pieces of land on two sides of the border, then it is a macroregion or greater region. I will look for more encyclopedic definitions. You especially made me understand, that there is a need for more information on the diversity of the term saarlorlux--Thw1309 23:23, 27 June 2007 (UTC) Done

• The introduction is too short. I suggest that, in addition to giving summary definitions of 'Euregion' and 'macroregion', one also adds paragraphs on summaries of its characteristics (paragraph 2) and on its functions and activities (paragraph 3).

You are right. This will require some additional reading too, because it is difficult to give a short summary of a term with so many interlocked meanings. --Thw1309 23:23, 27 June 2007 (UTC)

• Names and titles should be given in English; I've changed a few of these.

 DoneI hope I found everything--Thw1309 23:23, 27 June 2007 (UTC)

• Wikilinking is required throughout much of it.

 Done --Thw1309 23:23, 27 June 2007 (UTC)

• References should use the standard citation templates.

 Done --Thw1309 14:21, 28 June 2007 (UTC)

• The relationship between the text and the sources should be better established; every time a fact or statistic is given, a source should be cited. One can achieve this easily by citing a source more than once, by using the mechanism <ref="[Unique title for source]" />.
• There is some awkward phraseology and under-punctuation, particularly with regards to commas. I'll probably see to this myself.

I am sorry about the phraseology, but English is not my native language. --Thw1309 23:23, 27 June 2007 (UTC)

• It isn't established how SaarLorLux relates to the similar Greater Region.

This depends on the person you ask, because the term SaarLorLux is used in many different ways, but I will investigate.--Thw1309 23:23, 27 June 2007 (UTC)

That's all I've got at the moment. Bastin 17:45, 27 June 2007 (UTC)

You were great help. Thank you very much. --Thw1309 23:23, 27 June 2007 (UTC)